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Old 10-10-2004, 10:08 PM   #1
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Another phone call that’s unreturned
Another side of my pride is burned
Cant you see that this hurts
From the kiss you pushed away
You don’t even need to say
Because ill say it first
I am so sick of this place
I cant stand my own face
And I hate that this hurts
I hate that I’m open
While You don’t even see how much you mean
How far in you’ve seen
I miss you
And I should do nothing but forget you
But I cant
So I’m left to wonder
Because Iv been replaced with another
What’s left that we can possibly be
Did you even leave any of me?
But the pain reminds me you didn’t
That we didn’t make it
And this will kill me
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Old 10-10-2004, 10:52 PM   #2
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I liked it i dont know what to call it
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything
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Old 10-10-2004, 11:06 PM   #3
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very emotional writing...a thought...what do you think of "I've Always Known"...
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Old 10-11-2004, 12:18 PM   #4
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that would be a nice one
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything
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Old 10-12-2004, 12:45 AM   #5
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That was a really good poem.How about "This really hurts" or "I'll miss you"
tell me what cha think.that poem again rocked
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Old 10-12-2004, 01:25 AM   #6
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I like "Ill miss you" , feels right. and thanks for the kind words
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Old 10-12-2004, 11:27 AM   #7
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your welcome and thanx
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