Little Flower

Dogstar · 11-13-2003, 04:51 AM

Little Flower

Slam the door, blue streak swear
Slap the girl, crack a beer
Silent dinner, stomach turns
Cannot swallow, anger burns

Mother cries, babies sleep
Wonders how she'll make ends meet
Stretching thin her meager pay
Hopes she can buy meat today

Little flower gone to seed
Choking on a broken dream
Trusted him to make her whole
Alone again, familiar role

Little girl she longs to please
Sidles up to Daddy's knees
Father smacks her smile away
Screams at little girl go play

Weekends drawn in smoky room
Watching movies until noon
Waiting for the show to start
Words they spear a wounded heart

Little flower gone to seed
Choking on a broken dream
Trusted him to make her whole
Alone again, unwanted role

Little girl is now a wife
Wonders how she drew this life
Fixes dinner, makes his bed
Bathes his kids, shakes her head

Slam the door, blue streak swear
Slap the wife, crack a beer
Waiting for the stack to blow
Can't escape the undertow

Little flower gone to seed
Choking on a broken dream
Trusted him to make her whole
Alone again, accepted role

Sheila63 · 11-13-2003, 10:29 AM

Wow, Dogstar, that's a powerful poem, it moved me to tears. I really felt the loneliness and emptiness. Great writing!!!

SCOTTSMYMAN · 11-13-2003, 10:51 AM

Great Poem Kerri! Very emotional and sad! It was very powerful! I could feel the loneliness in it also! Keep them coming!!

whitebird · 11-13-2003, 02:31 PM

I had to take a deep breath after that one, I could actually feel the pain within the lines. Very well written, and tearfully sad.

TeriB19 · 11-13-2003, 09:08 PM

You need to write a book, you could make a living at your writing (I mean in addition to your writing at the paper). That was really moving.

Dogstar · 11-14-2003, 02:32 AM

Thanks, you guys

...I hope I didn't bum y'all out or anything.

creedsister · 11-14-2003, 12:31 PM

Dogstar,,,that,,was,,great,,,i can,,relate to it,,,somewhat,,,

Alter Shredder · 11-14-2003, 06:02 PM

Wow. Unbelieveable. I dont know what else to say after reading that beautiful poem. It was very moving.

creedsister · 11-14-2003, 06:27 PM

yes,,,its pretty darn good,,,i thought its misery hell on earth,,i THINK I LOVE IT

Dogstar · 11-14-2003, 06:48 PM

Thanks a bunch...You guys are too kind!

Creed_Defaultgirl · 11-22-2003, 12:40 AM

Like, when you get a book or something like that, will you tell me so I can go buy it? These are just awesome!

Dogstar · 11-22-2003, 12:54 AM

LOL...I'm glad folks are enjoying them...I've been on a writing tear of late...It always comes in spurts.

Creed_Defaultgirl · 11-22-2003, 01:12 AM

I know how you feel. For me to write something, the mood comes, like if someone makes me mad, and when I'm sad, Kind of weird huh?

Dogstar · 11-22-2003, 01:16 AM

Yep, I know what you mean. It's like a burr on my mind...I have to get rid of it.

Creed_Defaultgirl · 11-22-2003, 02:36 AM

Exactly!

11-13-2003, 04:51 AM	#1
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Little Flower Slam the door, blue streak swear Slap the girl, crack a beer Silent dinner, stomach turns Cannot swallow, anger burns Mother cries, babies sleep Wonders how she'll make ends meet Stretching thin her meager pay Hopes she can buy meat today Little flower gone to seed Choking on a broken dream Trusted him to make her whole Alone again, familiar role Little girl she longs to please Sidles up to Daddy's knees Father smacks her smile away Screams at little girl go play Weekends drawn in smoky room Watching movies until noon Waiting for the show to start Words they spear a wounded heart Little flower gone to seed Choking on a broken dream Trusted him to make her whole Alone again, unwanted role Little girl is now a wife Wonders how she drew this life Fixes dinner, makes his bed Bathes his kids, shakes her head Slam the door, blue streak swear Slap the wife, crack a beer Waiting for the stack to blow Can't escape the undertow Little flower gone to seed Choking on a broken dream Trusted him to make her whole Alone again, accepted role __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-13-2003, 10:29 AM	#2
Sheila63 USER INFO » Status: Opened My Eyes Posts: 5,748 Joined: Dec 2002 Currently: Offline	Wow, Dogstar, that's a powerful poem, it moved me to tears. I really felt the loneliness and emptiness. Great writing!!! __________________ I was selfish, but you still loved me You gave the greatest gift of all And you set me free Relearn Love

11-13-2003, 09:08 PM	#5
TeriB19 Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Saving Grace Posts: 12,439 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	You need to write a book, you could make a living at your writing (I mean in addition to your writing at the paper). That was really moving. __________________ MK: We're never gonna have the Super Bowl of Scott Stapp vs. Myles Kennedy in a sing-off - it's ridiculous. SP: Actually, we are setting that up. MT: It was in your contract when you signed up with us.

11-14-2003, 02:32 AM	#6
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Thanks, you guys ...I hope I didn't bum y'all out or anything. __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-14-2003, 12:31 PM	#7
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Dogstar,,,that,,was,,great,,,i can,,relate to it,,,somewhat,,, __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

11-13-2003, 02:31 PM	#4
whitebird USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 630 Joined: Feb 2003 Currently: Offline	I had to take a deep breath after that one, I could actually feel the pain within the lines. Very well written, and tearfully sad.

11-14-2003, 06:02 PM	#8
Alter Shredder USER INFO » Status: Blue Collar Posts: 599 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Wow. Unbelieveable. I dont know what else to say after reading that beautiful poem. It was very moving.

11-14-2003, 06:27 PM	#9
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	yes,,,its pretty darn good,,,i thought its misery hell on earth,,i THINK I LOVE IT __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

11-14-2003, 06:48 PM	#10
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Thanks a bunch...You guys are too kind! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-22-2003, 12:40 AM	#11
Creed_Defaultgirl USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 903 Joined: Nov 2003 Currently: Offline	Like, when you get a book or something like that, will you tell me so I can go buy it? These are just awesome! __________________ "...My beaten heart is in your hands, What I really need is shelter, And a chance to relearn love, Teach me all over, All over to relearn love, Show me again, So I can relearn love, The comfort of your arms around me, Your tender hands caress my head, I lay beside you, I'm not worthy..." Relearn Love~Scott Stapp

11-22-2003, 12:54 AM	#12
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	LOL...I'm glad folks are enjoying them...I've been on a writing tear of late...It always comes in spurts. __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-22-2003, 01:12 AM	#13
Creed_Defaultgirl USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 903 Joined: Nov 2003 Currently: Offline	I know how you feel. For me to write something, the mood comes, like if someone makes me mad, and when I'm sad, Kind of weird huh? __________________ "...My beaten heart is in your hands, What I really need is shelter, And a chance to relearn love, Teach me all over, All over to relearn love, Show me again, So I can relearn love, The comfort of your arms around me, Your tender hands caress my head, I lay beside you, I'm not worthy..." Relearn Love~Scott Stapp

11-22-2003, 01:16 AM	#14
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Yep, I know what you mean. It's like a burr on my mind...I have to get rid of it. __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-22-2003, 02:36 AM	#15
Creed_Defaultgirl USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 903 Joined: Nov 2003 Currently: Offline	Exactly! __________________ "...My beaten heart is in your hands, What I really need is shelter, And a chance to relearn love, Teach me all over, All over to relearn love, Show me again, So I can relearn love, The comfort of your arms around me, Your tender hands caress my head, I lay beside you, I'm not worthy..." Relearn Love~Scott Stapp

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