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12-01-2003, 03:46 AM | #1 |
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Crown of thorns is getting tight
Cobalt veins pierce the night Body shaking soaked in sweat Spirit broken objective met Choking on tears Gasping for air Fragile psyche Hangs by a hair Bleeding, peeling, scabbing skin Head won’t heal, can’t calm the din Violet rage draped in red Scarlet letter to soul is wed Choking on tears Gasping for air Blistered psyche Oozes despair Come to me blue angels scream Take you far from nightmare scene One more swallow watch the glow Soon you’ll reach the rabbit hole Choking on tears Gasping for air Shattered psyche Beyond repair
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Wow...mind if I borrow that? Psych, just kidding, I don't know what I would do with it if I could. But the thing is, I see a shadow of Sidonie Creed in it. It's hella weird. And very interesting. I really like your style--succinct, vivid, and very, very mature. In a few words: I BET STAPPY WOULD LOVE IT!!!! Heh heh, just kidding.
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Another awesome poem by: Kerri! Girl, I was waiting for a new one. I can't believe how wonderful your poetry is. I was feeling some rage in that one! Keep the words flowing!
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Thanks, you guys!
Sid, that's weird that you see some of you in that, but cool that people can find something in it for them. That's what I like about poems and music. It's whatever it means to the person hearing or reading it.
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more misery i think i like it
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LOL, I hope I didn't bum ya out or anything...guess that's my negative side coming out. Writing helps me stay balanced .
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That was very very good, I wish I could write like that!!!
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Awww, thank you, MrSeeker .
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Your very welcome
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It is weird, eh? But also is the mark of some real damn good poetry.
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Thanks, Sid! You're too kind.
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Love it. Dark, imagery(sp?), good cadence...excellent!!!!!
Just the kind of stuff I wish I could write.......well, maybe someday. Not there yet.....
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Powerful poem, Kerri!!! I feel the intensity of the pain and desperation.
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Hey creedite, let US be the judge of that!!!
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lol
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