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01-27-2004, 11:14 PM | #1 |
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Out of Life (Full version)
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Because he cant take it anymore He's tired of feeling this way To fight these demons each day He's had more then any man can take He feels he's about to break He's in harms way But its time to play He takes out the knife And takes his own life Its sad to see a life end up like this He may not realize it,but he will be deeply missed It hurts to feel the weight of a shattered heart To feel the cold passing of someone depart She waste's her life away to prostitution each day All she needs is someone to love But no one's ever around to give her enough She found herself in a helpess situation The guy had a knife and likes mutilation She's in harms way But its time to play He took out the knife And took her tourmented life Its sad to see a life end up like this She may not realize it,but she will be deeply missed It hurts to feel the haunting voice of someone going away To to feel their binding chanes that binded them each day A man hide behind the mask he's made He feels so alone and is always afraid He is hollow with no one to love him This lonely man hates the world he lives in He wants out of this bitter,cold place To feel the warmth of somewhere else upon his face This lonely man is me And he feels so empty He's in harms way But its time to play Out of hope Out of blood Out of breath Out of life Im giving up,I cant take this anymore Blood,it pours out onto the floor" Ok,hope you like it! I feel it is my best yet. What do you think?
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01-27-2004, 11:18 PM | #2 |
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That was good Kevin! So sad but good
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That was awesome Kevin! I kind of can't really find the right words! Very deep and grippingly emotional!
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not a shocker but its really good and said most of all but awsome!!!!!!
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I already told you I really liked it, but you really should start putting some music to this stuff and send it to me
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Thanks alot you guys!!!
S.A., I am trying the best I can,I need my lazy friends to get their acts together though But yea,Im trying!
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Did you try threatening them with me yet? |
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Not yet,hahaha, I will be sure to do that though
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MrSeeker, I like this one a lot, but I still think Kill the Living is my favorite so far ...
Love these lines: A man hide behind the mask he's made He feels so alone and is always afraid He is hollow with no one to love him And I'm wit SleeplessAngel...I want to hear your stuff put to music! I'll bet it will rock.
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Those lines are what got my interest the most as we find out that the narrator is going through the same thing. You could even analyze and ask if the narrator is doin' it because of the pain of loosin' the other two. It's awesome when different ways can be interpeted from poems, great job.
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Thanks soooooo much!!!! I cant tell you how much your kind words mean to me,thanks
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