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Old 06-13-2010, 02:16 AM   #1
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Onwards On You

In September I'll be a runner
Running away from all I don't hunger
And I'm hungry for a timer
So in a diner I'll be in comfort
With you

To slow it down

Yeah it feels
Like I'm on my own

And it feels
Like I'm all alone

In the fields
Of a cornerstone

And the wheels
They won't stop turning, no

Mama said "You don't know,
But you have to go."
On my own, here I know
I will go alone

And I will strive onwards
And I will thrive on you
I won't battle backwards
Because there's a fight in you

Yeah it feels
Like I'm on my own

And it feels
Like I'm all alone

In the fields
Of a cornerstone

And the wheels
They won't stop turning, no

With the future
Itching my nose
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Old 06-13-2010, 04:39 AM   #2
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Re: Onwards On You

Kwl I really liked it. I like the story that you have told and the fact you haven't overdone it on the rhyming. Nice one
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Old 06-13-2010, 05:15 AM   #3
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Thanks. While writing I was trying to capture a kind of mix between Third Eye Blind and U2.
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Quote: (Originally Posted by nagpo) Thanks. While writing I was trying to capture a kind of mix between Third Eye Blind and U2.
reminds me of soul A. Run Away Train And Green Days Oh Wake Me When Sept Ends... im alone in the fields of a cornerstone i really fell in those verses, something we all can relate to, reminds me also of one mine brain storms potery Floating, but yeah i liked the entire piece ....
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Thanks a lot
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Old 06-16-2010, 10:04 AM   #6
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Quote: (Originally Posted by nagpo) Thanks a lot
your welcome as always, nagpo from alternativing wrting style and putting things together , your one of the best, man....
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