"the Beautiful Tragedy"

[MrSeeker]

12-6-03
Here is somthing i just wrote seconds ago!!!

"Murder!!! The sound makes my blood curtal!!! So beautiful.
The sound of you without air,
The thought of you holding on to one last breath,so cruel,yet,so fair.
So beautiful,whats beautiful to me is seeing you lifeless with blood splattered all over your body.

Your blood in my hands, so beautiful!!!
Your screaming voice, so beautiful!!!
Your life in my hands, so beautiful!!!
Your lifeless corpse, so beautiful!!!

Your haunting smile, tragic!!!
Your blinding beauty, tragic!!!
Your eyes,so dark and so deep, tragic!!!
Your voice like angels, tragic!!!

So tragic!!! Scream from the grave,which you tried to save!!!
Haunt the one that brought you the sun!!!
Corrupt the truth that we all knew!!!

So tragic,whats so tragic is that you were so beautiful on the surface,yet,
Beautiful as Hell deep down within"

What do you think? I am going to add more to it and stuff later,but i wanted to post this here quick. I dont even have it written on paper yet,so i am about to go write it on paper. Hope you like it!!!
p.s. This is screamed,so thats why its like it is. ;)

*EDITED!!!! I just added to it*

[creedsister]

it really touch me,, my eyes are full,,,,,,,,,

[MrSeeker]

Of tears? Dont say tears, i dont want it to make you cry!!!
You got what its about right? Being beautiful on the outside,but not on the inside...

[creedsister]

i got it,,ok,,im ok,,k;;;

[MrSeeker]

Ok,good!

[creedsister]

ok GOOD,,im going nite nite;;;;

[MrSeeker]

I guess this is a little too much for people,haha

[GeeK_2004]

good song.....good lyrics...

[MrSeeker]

HAHAHA,thanks :D

[creedsister]

<!--QuoteBegin-MrSeeker+12-07-2003 04:41 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (MrSeeker @ 12-07-2003 04:41 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> I guess this is a little too much for people,haha [/b][/quote]
i think mayby its too deep,,ya know,,but of course im use too deepness,,,LOL

[creedsister]

<!--QuoteBegin-GeeK_2004+12-07-2003 06:12 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (GeeK_2004 @ 12-07-2003 06:12 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> good song.....good lyrics... [/b][/quote]
that too

[Dogstar]

Hella good song lyrics!!! That is heav-eeeeeeeeeeeeee!

[MrSeeker]

Thanks!!!
I love how all the sudden people say hella good,it cracks me up,hehe.
anywayz, yea, im into the deep stuff, this is probly my favorite thing i've written...

[creedsister]

i like it to its kinda funny,,but i think its one of my faves to,, your are a really diverse writer kev,,lol

[MrSeeker]

Thanks, I could probly right somthing about anything. I have even written two joke songs,haha,but i love deep and dark stuff so i will keep to that :D

[creedsister]

i know it me too i cant escape from these 2 things misery and the unexplanable,,,i got one tho i mite post later god give it to me its really like more of a gospel think but i really like it and means a lot to me

[MrSeeker]

Co_0L

[creedsister]

i going post it just as soon as i can,,allright

[creedsister]

ok

[Torn Signs]

Once again the man has shown his domain. Awesome job again. The way you write shows the emotion and the intensity. You could be there and listen to it while also understanding the pov of the person of whom you are writing from. Great job, keep it up and have a good day,

Kim ;)

[MrSeeker]

Once again the man has shown his domain. Awesome job again. The way you write shows the emotion and the intensity. You could be there and listen to it while also understanding the pov of the person of whom you are writing from. Great job, keep it up and have a good day,

Kim ;)
Thanks alot Kim!!! :D

[Torn Signs]

Thanks alot Kim!!! :D


Yep, no problem, I don't lie about it either. Good day! ;)

[MrSeeker]

Yep, no problem, I don't lie about it either. Good day! ;)
I know you dont Kim :D

[PaulMcCoygirl]

Keep up the great writing. That poem is some powerful stuff! :)

[MrSeeker]

Keep up the great writing. That poem is some powerful stuff! :)
Thanks alot!!! :D