Poem!!!!

[CreedGuy16]

hope u like it


Help Me Live

see these thoughts play in my head
they would kill my heart buts its already dead
so hear my cries sing me to sleep
for peace I have lost is why I must weep
so feel my pain locked deep inside
pain I tried so hard to cover and hide
so instead see my blood in inocent red
running from my head innocently shed
see all of these things delt to me
do you think this is what I want to be
look and see my soul grow old
dying because of the hate u hold
why cant I know the peace I seek
so much time and im growing weak
I hope I can find a way out
but im shackled by mistrust and bound by dout
some one help me live, help me live

[JulieCitySlicker]

That was very deep but very good as well:P I can relate to this cuz I've had those same feelings in my life every now and then:(

[Redeemer]

Oh, how tortured! Seriously. I love it. You write like me, 'cept I don't rhyme b/c I have to try too hard to find rhymes and it ruins the effect for me. But not for you!!! You made the rhyme work and didn't lose your "voice". Three thumbs up!!!!!

[The Lithium]

I write a lot myself...The lady upstairs would know, don't you Red-M?:D

[Siana]

i like it

[creedsister]

hay...creedguy 16....i will give it a shot k...jesus said iam the truth the way and the life....he will pick up the pices time and time again.......by the way it was good little poem...peace

[Dogstar]

Creedguy16, nice job! Beautifully expressed!