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Redeemer
02-19-2003, 08:29 AM
...and I have to send in 5-7 pages of poems, can you be-LEEVE it?!?! Here's one of them, tell me if you like it...

Live Again

Red.
All I see is red.
Blood runs down my arms, my thighs
My hands shake violently, so violently that
I almost drop the blade that is enclosed in them.
The bloody vision blurs before my eyes
It takes a moment for me to realize
that I am crying.
Just what am I trying to prove?
That my life really is as destroyed
as everyone says it is?
That I am a victim
of the most sordid of acts?
That I'll never live
as that child that danced in sunbeams
again?
In the midst of the darkness, my darkness
I look up
and see the light.
Unconsciously I reach out for the rays
spilling through my window
and envision that God is shining down upon
my ravaged form.
I can almost hear his voice!
I envision him saying to me,
You can look at yourself, child,
and live again.

Bridge of Clay
02-19-2003, 10:49 PM
wow!!! thatīs pretty good! :)

at first I thought it was too dark, but when I reached the bottom line I was speechless! well done!

I liked the way you created a shock for those who are reading it!

Redeemer
02-20-2003, 09:50 AM
Thanx, Marcos! See, the support goes both ways! :dancing: :D

Bridge of Clay
02-21-2003, 05:47 PM
yep it does!

:angel: :angel: :P

hotforscott
02-23-2003, 02:42 AM
That is good!

SCOTTSMYMAN
02-23-2003, 10:10 AM
:bow: :cool:
Great poem!!!