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nagpo
06-13-2010, 02:16 AM
In September I'll be a runner
Running away from all I don't hunger
And I'm hungry for a timer
So in a diner I'll be in comfort
With you

To slow it down

Yeah it feels
Like I'm on my own

And it feels
Like I'm all alone

In the fields
Of a cornerstone

And the wheels
They won't stop turning, no

Mama said "You don't know,
But you have to go."
On my own, here I know
I will go alone

And I will strive onwards
And I will thrive on you
I won't battle backwards
Because there's a fight in you

Yeah it feels
Like I'm on my own

And it feels
Like I'm all alone

In the fields
Of a cornerstone

And the wheels
They won't stop turning, no

With the future
Itching my nose

adparaiki
06-13-2010, 04:39 AM
Kwl I really liked it. I like the story that you have told and the fact you haven't overdone it on the rhyming. Nice one :smokin:

nagpo
06-13-2010, 05:15 AM
Thanks. While writing I was trying to capture a kind of mix between Third Eye Blind and U2.

TrulyAmazing
06-14-2010, 10:18 PM
Thanks. While writing I was trying to capture a kind of mix between Third Eye Blind and U2.
reminds me of soul A. Run Away Train And Green Days Oh Wake Me When Sept Ends... im alone in the fields of a cornerstone i really fell in those verses, something we all can relate to, reminds me also of one mine brain storms potery Floating, but yeah i liked the entire piece ....

nagpo
06-15-2010, 12:51 AM
Thanks a lot :)

TrulyAmazing
06-16-2010, 10:04 AM
Thanks a lot :)
your welcome as always, nagpo :) from alternativing wrting style and putting things together , your one of the best, man.... :rockon: