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inside_us_all04
06-09-2008, 09:16 PM
i gave it all i have
you took your love from me
gave you my soul and my heart
you ripped it to shreads
your dishonesty distain for any type
of lasting relationship
how you played me like a fool
and lied to my family and i ,i despise you

i gave it my all
all that i had
you weekend me with your venom
this is my surender

ive given up hope even tho
i havent seen or talked to you in a year
i still think of you makes my blood boil
all the negativity and drunken slutting around
did you even think of me when you fucked
someone else on my 21st birthday
or drove my moms car intoxicated
do you have any self respect left
or did you drink it away i wonder

i gave it my all
all that i had
you weekend me with your venom
this is my surender

lying to my family and i
telling them you hadnt been drinking
i guess that bottle under your bed
was your dogs, gee
you must love the attention your drinkin gets
getting banned from AA, going to hospitals
havin the emts haul your ass of you must love it
everyone pittying you payin attention to you
cuz for a minute its all about you i surender
you won

TrulyAmazing
06-12-2008, 08:36 PM
:) that was really good reminds me of strawberry fields really bush like Great Job,

nagpo
06-18-2008, 10:41 PM
i like it. it's like your talking to her, instead of writing her a poem. while still poetically(corectly) getting your point across.

TrulyAmazing
06-21-2008, 11:06 PM
i like it. it's like your talking to her, instead of writing her a poem. while still poetically(corectly) getting your point across.
i know i for one agree again it was written with brilliants as far as brilliant potery from the wrting stanza this is about the best i,ve read in a while