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nagpo
04-20-2008, 01:28 PM
Who's gonna save me
When you leave, baby

Who's going to breath
Into me, wandering

Cause these loving feelings
Do not fade, easily

The Moon's coverd
By clouds and storms at sea

I feel like an ocean of motion
Why can't I just relax?

It's windy

I'm a rod
With no electricity
A fire
Without any flames

And why can't you watch my back?

They tell me life's a rollercoaster
With it's ups and downs
Oh I think they're lying
Cause I've always worn a frown

And time is not enough, no
Lies aren't sweet enough, no

At times I am willing
To do my best
But who am I kidding?
I'll never best the rest
So why can't you be here?
Pitying the pest

The sun won't rise
Not this very night
But I feel the flames,
Oh I feel the flames
Rise

Who's going to breath
Into me, wandering

TrulyAmazing
04-20-2008, 10:05 PM
And time is not enough, lies aren,t sweet enough, those lines are awsome,loved the entire piece very deep very emotional very bold

nagpo
04-20-2008, 10:34 PM
thank you so much

TrulyAmazing
04-21-2008, 09:29 PM
your welcome

Dogstar
04-26-2008, 10:22 PM
Great job. I especially liked these lines:

I feel like an ocean of motion
Why can't I just relax?

That says a lot.

nagpo
04-26-2008, 10:33 PM
thanks a ton man.:)

TrulyAmazing
04-28-2008, 08:29 PM
thanks a ton man.:)
that always happens a lot kerri Has Got That Amazon Appeal I Know Shes A really cool chicky nagpo