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Old 12-07-2004, 10:51 PM   #1
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Like A Dog I Return

Shrinking violet oh so strangely verbose
Even though you've done this to me
Like a dog I return
I can't quite figure out why
So tired of this manna
Return me to my slavish depravity

Chorus
Can't quite fill the hole
Smile at the thought of you
The music we made
My juxtaposed lover
Your yoke on the floor

Ruminate my flowers bought your soul
Your lips planted in my head
So ravenous

Verse 2
Baby I loved you, offered up
All but my life
Gaze into those big blue eyes
Totally oblivious to the smoke in mine

There was a day oh so long ago
When you were a harmless sin
Now with my conscience awakened
What someone knows?
Darkness chokes my soul
One bullet at a time
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Old 12-07-2004, 11:19 PM   #2
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Now Thats Some Kick Ass Writing You Gotta It GOING ONNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything
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Old 12-08-2004, 12:09 AM   #3
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...nicely done...
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Old 12-08-2004, 12:29 AM   #4
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Ann Allusion) ...nicely done...
Yes It Was
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Old 12-08-2004, 01:47 AM   #5
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thanks....
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Didnít have a life.
Didnít have a life.
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Old 12-08-2004, 02:04 AM   #6
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Wicked cool, hide. Nice job...
Loooooved this part:

Ruminate my flowers bought your soul
Your lips planted in my head
So ravenous
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Old 12-08-2004, 02:06 AM   #7
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) Wicked cool, hide. Nice job...
Loooooved this part:

Ruminate my flowers bought your soul
Your lips planted in my head
So ravenous

thanks and this one took a bit more work then other ones i've written. if only i could play guitar much better and sing much better lol.
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Old 12-08-2004, 02:54 AM   #8
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I'd be happy to be able to PLAY the guitar...some day...
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Old 12-08-2004, 12:04 PM   #9
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) I'd be happy to be able to PLAY the guitar...some day...
Yes Me To But Ah Well Keepa Dreaming
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Old 12-08-2004, 06:44 PM   #10
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that was awesome
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Old 12-08-2004, 11:42 PM   #11
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) I'd be happy to be able to PLAY the guitar...some day...

i'm learning but i'm not very good lol
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Old 12-23-2004, 10:51 PM   #12
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Ooh I found one!

Wow, that was really good, reminds me a little of PJ's Garden. Well done!
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After the flood all the colours came out.'

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Quote: (Originally Posted by - hayley -) Ooh I found one!

Wow, that was really good, reminds me a little of PJ's Garden. Well done!

thanks ......garden? ummm haden't thought of that. i do a bit of a debt to maynard james keenan of a perfect circle for the general theme of the song though.
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Yeah just a little like Garden, but it's probably how I interpret that song, it's very personal to me. The "Like a dog I return" line, especially.

But seriously well done it was great
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Aotearoa right in front of you.
See the land of the long white cloud
Cape Reinga, to the fiords in the south.
Harbour lights in the City of Sails
Aroha, the love that never fails
See the bird with the leaf in her mouth
After the flood all the colours came out.'

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Old 01-02-2005, 01:47 AM   #15
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Quote: (Originally Posted by - hayley -) Yeah just a little like Garden, but it's probably how I interpret that song, it's very personal to me. The "Like a dog I return" line, especially.

But seriously well done it was great

thanks i appreciate it!
the like a dog line reminds me a bit of the temple of a dog song titled "like a dog" stangely enough although i can't remember if it was thinking of that song at the time.
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