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Old 05-29-2004, 01:52 PM   #1
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this is a poem that a friend of mine wrote im supposed to get an opinion about it for her. i dont think it's that great but im trying my best to stick with it...


"Whether you see the world either
cold and bitter,
or warm and fuzzy,
do you not notive the rest of the world,
do you not think of the people unknown?"


p.s. told you it was lame.....
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Old 05-29-2004, 02:55 PM   #2
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Hmmm, I don't think it's lame. It says a lot in a few words. I think the speaker is telling someone to get his head out of his a** and stop being so self-absorbed. Maybe imploring the person to give a little and live a little and do what he can to make the world a better place. I think the speaker is trying to tell this person that the world doesn't revolve around him.

Just my 2 cents .
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Old 05-29-2004, 04:52 PM   #3
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Quote: (Originally Posted by jbjfan) this is a poem that a friend of mine wrote im supposed to get an opinion about it for her. i dont think it's that great but im trying my best to stick with it...


"Whether you see the world either
cold and bitter,
or warm and fuzzy,
do you not notive the rest of the world,
do you not think of the people unknown?"


p.s. told you it was lame.....
I LOVED IT WHOOOOOO
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Old 05-29-2004, 10:16 PM   #4
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I don't think it's lame either. Sometimes the shortest poems say the most. And sometimes the longest poems say nothing at all.
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Old 06-05-2004, 11:53 PM   #5
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i didnt mean the poem was lame. i meant that she was. she entered that poem in a c0ntest and it wasn't hers. and she got money for it. i havent respected her since. the poems pretty good though. i just feel bad for amy, she deserved the credit.
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Wow, that is lame. Unless you ask permission first of course
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