Run (new poem)

stappissohot · 11-11-2005, 02:56 AM

Fleeing from myself, I run away
Run away from my problems
Problems I face each day
Hopelessness no greeting me
Greeting me with open arms
People do not understand, they don't see
See that maybe I feel
Maybe I bleed
Let music be my shield
Let music be my escape from the world
Running faster now
Feelings of anger and rage catch up
Too many feelings than I can allow
Darkness envelops my soul
Death the ultimate goal
I'm on my knees now
Begging for help
Where has the world gone?
They pass by the week
They continue to seek
Seeking only their own happiness
Letting us fall
Letting us fall

Rocketqueen · 11-11-2005, 11:00 AM

i loved the entire piece but these lines really stuck out people do not understand they dont see that mabey i feel maybe i bleed ...let music be my shield let music be my escape, where has the world gone they pass by the weak they contiue to seek only their own happiness awsome writing sweetheart

uncertaindrumer · 11-11-2005, 11:37 AM

Not original at all. I felt like I had heard every line already. How many times can we write about running away? You need to think more outside of the box.

Dogstar · 11-11-2005, 11:44 AM

The theme may be tired, but maybe it's not tired to Stappissohot. A lot of people write just for catharsis and not necessarily for anything or anyone.

stappissohot · 11-11-2005, 02:12 PM

Quote: (Originally Posted by Rocketqueen) i loved the entire piece but these lines really stuck out people do not understand they dont see that mabey i feel maybe i bleed ...let music be my shield let music be my escape, where has the world gone they pass by the weak they contiue to seek only their own happiness awsome writing sweetheart

Thanks....yeah well it wasn't as good as my other one which I really like even though the ;ast part of the other one was kinda plagerized, I can always take that out...but this one at least was original... all of my poems are written about me and my life so....yeah....so the whole thing pretty much is me.....nobody really can see that unless they are me so that's a problem, lol, but thanks

uncertaindrumer · 11-11-2005, 04:59 PM

Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) The theme may be tired, but maybe it's not tired to Stappissohot. A lot of people write just for catharsis and not necessarily for anything or anyone.

That's true and if she likes it, then it is all good and I'm happy for her. But if she wants other people to like it--which is sort of implied when one puts it online--I'm just giving my opinion of it.

stappissohot · 11-12-2005, 02:57 AM

I don't like it that much, I have made like 20 like it.....

Rocketqueen · 11-12-2005, 11:03 AM

Quote: (Originally Posted by stappissohot) Thanks....yeah well it wasn't as good as my other one which I really like even though the ;ast part of the other one was kinda plagerized, I can always take that out...but this one at least was original... all of my poems are written about me and my life so....yeah....so the whole thing pretty much is me.....nobody really can see that unless they are me so that's a problem, lol, but thanks

lol not a problem your welcome again sweetietarts

stappissohot · 11-12-2005, 01:34 PM

.....oooookkkkk......lol

Rocketqueen · 11-12-2005, 05:59 PM

ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo kkkkkk

stappissohot · 11-13-2005, 02:16 AM

lol....*eats mint chocolate chip ice cream* so what was this post about? lol....*grabs ice cream box* mine, alllllllll mine, ok fine I'll share *hands over some* I think I'm the only one who likes this flavor.....

Rocketqueen · 11-13-2005, 12:17 PM

Okkkkkkkkkkkkkkk the post remains a mystery

k is a word i use for comfort Like the krispy Creammmmmmmmmmmmmmm I love andes the york peppermint patty i really dont like that flavor Ice Cream i like cookie dough and rocky Road butter pecan Homemade Blueberry Peauntbutter and

Split those are my faves

stappissohot · 11-13-2005, 07:32 PM

Lol.... I like Who's Line Is It Anyway....the show.... my fave quote is this....
"Colin what comes to mind when I say scree?" Ryan
".....Sandpaper!" Colin

LOL!!!! ahahahaha sooo funny, I love that quote!

Rocketqueen · 11-13-2005, 11:21 PM

i never whatched that show what a dorky idea so i cant recall that episode to be honest with you the only thing on tv i whatch aside from music videos Is Sponge Bob I

him and the discovery channel when something intruges me and the weather channel it calms my nerves

stappissohot · 11-14-2005, 11:54 PM

I like Lost, That's So Raven, Most Haunted, and Scariest Places On Earth

11-11-2005, 11:00 AM	#2
Rocketqueen USER INFO » Status: Freedom Fighter Posts: 2,432 Joined: Oct 2005 Currently: Offline	i loved the entire piece but these lines really stuck out people do not understand they dont see that mabey i feel maybe i bleed ...let music be my shield let music be my escape, where has the world gone they pass by the weak they contiue to seek only their own happiness awsome writing sweetheart __________________ I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done

11-11-2005, 11:37 AM	#3
uncertaindrumer USER INFO » Status: Wound Up Posts: 1,255 Joined: Dec 2004 Currently: Offline	Not original at all. I felt like I had heard every line already. How many times can we write about running away? You need to think more outside of the box. __________________ Titans baby, Titans.

11-11-2005, 11:44 AM	#4
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	The theme may be tired, but maybe it's not tired to Stappissohot. A lot of people write just for catharsis and not necessarily for anything or anyone. __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

11-11-2005, 04:59 PM	#6
uncertaindrumer USER INFO » Status: Wound Up Posts: 1,255 Joined: Dec 2004 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) The theme may be tired, but maybe it's not tired to Stappissohot. A lot of people write just for catharsis and not necessarily for anything or anyone. That's true and if she likes it, then it is all good and I'm happy for her. But if she wants other people to like it--which is sort of implied when one puts it online--I'm just giving my opinion of it. __________________ Titans baby, Titans.

11-12-2005, 11:03 AM	#8
Rocketqueen USER INFO » Status: Freedom Fighter Posts: 2,432 Joined: Oct 2005 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by stappissohot) Thanks....yeah well it wasn't as good as my other one which I really like even though the ;ast part of the other one was kinda plagerized, I can always take that out...but this one at least was original... all of my poems are written about me and my life so....yeah....so the whole thing pretty much is me.....nobody really can see that unless they are me so that's a problem, lol, but thanks lol not a problem your welcome again sweetietarts __________________ I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done

11-12-2005, 05:59 PM	#10
Rocketqueen USER INFO » Status: Freedom Fighter Posts: 2,432 Joined: Oct 2005 Currently: Offline	ooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo kkkkkk __________________ I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done

11-13-2005, 12:17 PM	#12
Rocketqueen USER INFO » Status: Freedom Fighter Posts: 2,432 Joined: Oct 2005 Currently: Offline	Okkkkkkkkkkkkkkk the post remains a mystery k is a word i use for comfort Like the krispy Creammmmmmmmmmmmmmm I love andes the york peppermint patty i really dont like that flavor Ice Cream i like cookie dough and rocky Road butter pecan Homemade Blueberry Peauntbutter and Split those are my faves __________________ I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done

11-13-2005, 11:21 PM	#14
Rocketqueen USER INFO » Status: Freedom Fighter Posts: 2,432 Joined: Oct 2005 Currently: Offline	i never whatched that show what a dorky idea so i cant recall that episode to be honest with you the only thing on tv i whatch aside from music videos Is Sponge Bob I him and the discovery channel when something intruges me and the weather channel it calms my nerves __________________ I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done

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