Something Corrupt

MrSeeker · 01-10-2004, 02:17 AM

"Right from the start I tore my flesh apart
Born into this world so cold and so dark
Right from the start I cursed you
Right from the start we both knew
I was somthing corrupt

Im something corrupt,but Im not giving up
No,Im not giving in only to begin again

Im something corrupt,but Im not letting go
No,Im not letting go of what I know

Im the horrid voice within your head
Im the darkness that wants you dead
Im the shadow that will consume you
Im the past that will come back to haunt you

Im something corrupt,but Im not giving up
No,Im not giving in only to begin again

Im something corrupt,but Im not letting go
No,Im not letting go of what I know

As the seconds become minutes
As the days pass slowly by
As the years become double digits
Im afraid that you will have to die

Im something corrupt,but Im not giving up
No,Im not giving in only to begin again

Im something corrupt,but Im not letting go
No,Im not letting go of what I know
...Is true"

Hope ya like it...its a newer one

Dogstar · 01-10-2004, 02:30 AM

Very cool, MrSeeker. It has a Metallica feel to it, especially the part where it starts, I'm the horrid voice within your head!!

MrSeeker · 01-10-2004, 02:40 AM

Awesome!!! Thats what I was aiming for on it!!!

anywayz,i wish i would get dissed sometimes...im kinda tired of everyone saying how goodmy stuff is,but i guess its all good...haha
Thanks

Dogstar · 01-10-2004, 02:41 AM

Lmao!

Sheila63 · 01-10-2004, 07:26 PM

Well, I won't be dissing ya either, Mr. Seeker. It's a great poem. I love the ending, it wasn't what I was expecting.

creedsister · 01-10-2004, 08:59 PM

Quote: (Originally Posted by MrSeeker) Awesome!!! Thats what I was aiming for on it!!!

anywayz,i wish i would get dissed sometimes...im kinda tired of everyone saying how goodmy stuff is,but i guess its all good...haha
Thanks

there it sucked does that make you feel better haha}to be honest out of the dark stuff you,ve written i really love this one,,it gives me a do or die vibe i like that STRONG} Words,,i liked im not letting go of what i know

MrSeeker · 01-10-2004, 11:00 PM

Well,thanks you two

HAHAHA

creedsister · 01-10-2004, 11:39 PM

your welcome

Sheila63 · 01-11-2004, 07:44 PM

You're welcome.

Torn Signs · 01-13-2004, 08:03 AM

Yet again you pull it off, good job and the vibe is the best part, awesome.

creedsister · 01-14-2004, 01:00 AM

Quote: (Originally Posted by Torn Signs) Yet again you pull it off, good job and the vibe is the best part, awesome.

thats right

MrSeeker · 01-14-2004, 03:30 AM

Thanks alot Kim!
Hey we dont chat much anymore,we need to chat more.
Here's my email: [email protected]
Please email me!!! I love hearing from you!
Oh and all of you can check out my stuff together at my journal,which the link is in my sig,please check it out and post a comment telling me what ya think!

01-10-2004, 02:30 AM	#2
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Very cool, MrSeeker. It has a Metallica feel to it, especially the part where it starts, I'm the horrid voice within your head!! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-10-2004, 02:41 AM	#4
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Lmao! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-10-2004, 07:26 PM	#5
Sheila63 USER INFO » Status: Opened My Eyes Posts: 5,748 Joined: Dec 2002 Currently: Offline	Well, I won't be dissing ya either, Mr. Seeker. It's a great poem. I love the ending, it wasn't what I was expecting. __________________ I was selfish, but you still loved me You gave the greatest gift of all And you set me free Relearn Love

01-10-2004, 08:59 PM	#6
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by MrSeeker) Awesome!!! Thats what I was aiming for on it!!! anywayz,i wish i would get dissed sometimes...im kinda tired of everyone saying how goodmy stuff is,but i guess its all good...haha Thanks there it sucked does that make you feel better haha}to be honest out of the dark stuff you,ve written i really love this one,,it gives me a do or die vibe i like that STRONG} Words,,i liked im not letting go of what i know __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

01-10-2004, 11:39 PM	#8
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	your welcome __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

01-11-2004, 07:44 PM	#9
Sheila63 USER INFO » Status: Opened My Eyes Posts: 5,748 Joined: Dec 2002 Currently: Offline	You're welcome. __________________ I was selfish, but you still loved me You gave the greatest gift of all And you set me free Relearn Love

01-14-2004, 01:00 AM	#11
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by Torn Signs) Yet again you pull it off, good job and the vibe is the best part, awesome. thats right __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

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