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As They Say Goodbye
First of all hello to everyone I have not spoken to since.....well a very long time lol. Wrote some song lyrics and thought I would share. I would like some constructive critcism if anyone has any.
Favourite song played,vision of the casket carried away Breathe the last, one last look above Regret in hesitation Words said in desolation Fonder memories of the road a young woman paved Your light shining upon the way Many fish in the sea or so they say Only one for me, caught one fateful day As they say goodbye, tell them to shed no tears Had all a man could ask, when you uttered yes to me that glorious day Conversation in silence Far from an abomination Redundant words said You were fair and young And though your rose has faded It matters not to me You were always right In your eyes and mine All that matters now is I utter those words That have taken my whole life to find Discourse with the animals was always your way Father nature has its own religion No man chooses when he crashes his last wave So I go as the chorus plays Thoughts so hollow as the tears flow As the church bells ring now It may seem silly To believe in something I cannot know I know this is just goodbye for now
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Re: As They Say Goodbye
I found this strong potery of more than passion but strong in expeticting and learning ones nature has they grow and when they fade to and fro , i love the revealing structure in this one, and i loved and like worshpied the engraving of the depth structure, of it it stayed in a strong balance for mat like in the depths of the need and the heart of the writer, very un like your other wrtings, that spoke of parables of so much human nature and parables, and trying to avoid the deep issuies,
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Re: As They Say Goodbye
Nice job, hide! And nice to see you around.
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Re: As They Say Goodbye
this was good stuff man you should have done a copyright, but i loved it,
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