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10-03-2010, 03:49 PM | #1 |
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Poem Needs A Title
Here's the poem I wrote about my recent hospitalization and the nurse who helped me through the ordeal. The piece lacks a title, after reading please submit suggestions for the title.
Here I lay in this bed Shallow breathing, stats dropping I'm close to the end Asking my God for a second chance at life Suddenly I open my eyes to a room covered in white I'm tied down by hard lines, needles and cuffs I want to scream out loud "Enough is enough!" But I find my voice is lost Somewhere in the distance Pain races through my veins Like a fish out of water I'm broken, beat and scarred Next I'm taken away from that white room Back to my place of solitude Looking to my right I see on the door A message written for me "Get well; big smile. Yours truly." Followed by a handprint upon the broken glass I feel a warm hand carress my head I look but I see no one around That's how I know the promise you made "I'll always be there sincerely Ashley B." The spirit that will always be with me So though I'm shedding my skin I always see your smile carved within My heart, my soul and my spirit Even though you're not here to hear this I thank you from the bottom of my heart Because of you I have a fresh start So to you I must say I'll see you again at APH Farewell for now but don't forget Whenever you find yourself lonely or upset Remember these words and your tears will not fall "Love, Peace... And Justice For All."
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Kill Mickey Mouse,
Great Title, he is that killer in disney land, ugly kid joe found, and stay away from santa,s and all his elves, and the helping hands, with crocodile smiles, reminded me Of TALLICAS ONE, It Was A Good Piece Of Potery, Peace Be With You In Jesus Name, GOD IS WITH US, also reminds me of a song i,ve been working on as well,
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Re: Poem Needs A Title
Praying For Ya, all must be well in jesus name, as im revisting threads, loves ya all,
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Re: Poem Needs A Title
Good poem I really feel it and feel for you.
I guess the title should sum up what it's all about so something along the lines of - a few examples ... 1) helped from the edge , 2) close to the end a helping hand, 3) saving me 4) thankyou for a seond chance 5) saved me 6) Does thanks exist if it is not received I'll try and think of some more
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Re: Poem Needs A Title
all of those are swell, very smart to and swiftly a thinking of sharing the titles first, i was working called sorry no more, but being behind i doubt i get to a post it, for us, BLESSINGS AND STRENGETH ,
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