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Old 06-19-2005, 06:58 AM   #1
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Hey guys, this was my first attempt at writing songs and only managed to write it when drunk off my head. Its pretty sketchy, not really kind of stuff id like to write about, but it just came straight out my brain one night. Has no title either

people come
and people go
but those that hurt
seem to stay

love
can tear two apart
or bring them together
but what if
it did the same

you burst into my life
like a firework
then you left
like a dying flame
but your still here
haunting me

i still want you
even though it pains me
just to think of you

come back to me
fill this hole thats left
before it consumes
whats left of me

you burst into my life
like a firework
then you left
like a dying flame
but your still here
haunting me
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Old 06-19-2005, 02:37 PM   #2
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beautiful..if i wrote it , i would have went for a long title , like This >>> Haunting By A Passion In A Dying Flame ... i liked it Dear
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Old 06-20-2005, 04:08 PM   #3
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ditto, cs...i like it too...it was quite good for a first attempt at lyrics and i can see/hear the possibilities...as for a title...hmmm...how about "Flash"...because of how it talks about coming in like fireworks and leaving a dying flame...just a thought...

keep writing...that was well done...
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Old 06-20-2005, 05:03 PM   #4
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i liked it youve got some talent there
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Old 06-20-2005, 05:29 PM   #5
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Ann Allusion) ditto, cs...i like it too...it was quite good for a first attempt at lyrics and i can see/hear the possibilities...as for a title...hmmm...how about "Flash"...because of how it talks about coming in like fireworks and leaving a dying flame...just a thought...

keep writing...that was well done...
i like my long title
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Old 06-20-2005, 05:57 PM   #6
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Quote: i like my long title

so did i...
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In sleep he sang to me, in dreams he came
That voice which calls to me and speaks my name
And do I dream again, for now I find
The phantom of the opera is there...inside my mind

Christine/ Phantom Of The Opera


Abondon thought and let the dream decend....
Point of No Return/Phantom Of The Opera


You will forever remain the music
And I…the song you sing
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Old 06-21-2005, 09:12 AM   #7
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I like it too, nice song.
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