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10-05-2003, 11:14 PM | #1 |
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Poem!!!!
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Help Me Live see these thoughts play in my head they would kill my heart buts its already dead so hear my cries sing me to sleep for peace I have lost is why I must weep so feel my pain locked deep inside pain I tried so hard to cover and hide so instead see my blood in inocent red running from my head innocently shed see all of these things delt to me do you think this is what I want to be look and see my soul grow old dying because of the hate u hold why cant I know the peace I seek so much time and im growing weak I hope I can find a way out but im shackled by mistrust and bound by dout some one help me live, help me live |
10-06-2003, 12:18 AM | #2 |
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That was very deep but very good as well:P I can relate to this cuz I've had those same feelings in my life every now and then
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10-07-2003, 11:27 AM | #3 |
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Oh, how tortured! Seriously. I love it. You write like me, 'cept I don't rhyme b/c I have to try too hard to find rhymes and it ruins the effect for me. But not for you!!! You made the rhyme work and didn't lose your "voice". Three thumbs up!!!!!
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I write a lot myself...The lady upstairs would know, don't you Red-M?
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10-11-2003, 06:57 AM | #5 |
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i like it
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hay...creedguy 16....i will give it a shot k...jesus said iam the truth the way and the life....he will pick up the pices time and time again.......by the way it was good little poem...peace
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Creedguy16, nice job! Beautifully expressed!
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