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05-14-2004, 10:54 PM | #1 |
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Cold Embrace
"Dont look at me, Im just a scar from the past
Im just a blemish on your beautiful painting I've been told to sell my soul I'll never do such a thing to hurt you Blanket me in your cold embrace Just like years past When you brought a smile to my face Those days burned away like fire Like a soft breeze that blows away the pain The ground covered in blood Such a beautiful stain My heart is ready to be broken again Painted black from the tears of the fallen Carried out until the end Im ready to be made new Im ready to be with you My soul is reaching My body, Im leaving."
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Wow, excellent job, Mr.Seeker...Really good visuals...
Love the opening lines best: Dont look at me, Im just a scar from the past Im just a blemish on your beautiful painting And the ending is really strong, too!
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Thanks! Its a poem, not like my usual stuff. Im glad you like it
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i liked it
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