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Old 04-13-2004, 01:04 AM   #1
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You and I

So you’re on your own now
Nothing but a faded memory
You and I

So far away from what we were
Nothing but a dusty shelf
You and I

Pull me down
Push me over
Bait me

So you tread on hopeless wish
Nothing but a broken dream
You and I

So you drain a bleeding heart
Nothing but an empty frame
You and I

Pull me down
Push me over
Hate me

So you cling to someone new
Nothing but an afterthought
You and I

So you utter another vow
Nothing but a house of cards
You and I

Pull me down
Push me over
Waste me
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Old 04-13-2004, 02:53 AM   #2
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Pretty good! I like that!

I like these two lines:

So you drain a bleeding heart
Nothing but an empty frame
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Old 04-13-2004, 03:40 AM   #3
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good job again i also like those same lines!
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Old 04-13-2004, 12:53 PM   #4
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Thanks a bunch, you guys. Glad you liked it!
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Old 04-13-2004, 02:20 PM   #5
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These are great lyrics you come up with, Kerri. I might snag some when I start my little goth band
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Old 04-13-2004, 02:30 PM   #6
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LOL, thanks, Aimee!
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Old 04-13-2004, 03:27 PM   #7
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I really liked the picture you painted me there, but if you really wanna get me to buy the picture you gotta try more rhyme next time. Don't get me wrong, I liked it, but try rhyme next time, that would be awesome!
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Old 04-13-2004, 03:29 PM   #8
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LOL, I rhyme most of the time, so I wanted to try something different. And I think you don't always have to rhyme to paint an effective picture. But thanks for your input, Lith!
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Old 04-13-2004, 06:53 PM   #9
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I liked it Dogstar it sounds like someone Got set up for a downfall, i liked it
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Thanks, creedsister. Glad you enjoyed it.
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