Like Vapour

aussiecreeder · 01-09-2005, 06:47 PM

Forty, male, white and middle class
In my lifetime trials I will pass
Worship at the altar of ease
And pleasure oh what a beautiful young lover is she

Can't stand the clanging silence
My thoughts drive me to these pills
Yellow for up and Orange for down
Live under the sun

But now I look back
Oh the past was so much better
The only figures higher than my account
Are the regrets and these calories

I am like grass
Which tomorrow is gone
If I'm lucky they'll remember my name
Worked these frail hands to the bone
Half for my hopeless son to score a cone
And the remainder for the genes he has never seen

Wish I knew at birth that death is greater
That the end is better than the beginning
Because of all these passions and vapour
No laughter.....only sorrow

creedsister · 01-09-2005, 09:50 PM

Wish i knew at birth that death is Greater, it was cool, i know it was kinda serisous, but it hit me funny,

aussiecreeder · 01-10-2005, 02:09 AM

glad its funny although it wasen't really meant to be. if you dig it, it doesn't bother me why.

creedsister · 01-10-2005, 02:15 AM

I Know It, Was,ent It Just Hit Me Funny, A Lot Of Stuff Does, I That Normal Folk Would Not Find Funny, But Oh Well, I Liked It

Ann Allusion · 01-11-2005, 10:03 AM

nice writing, aussie...there are some sections in there that i find humourous as well, and others that take on a serious tone...but then isn't that what living life is?....a mixture of both humourous and serious..as well as good and bad...and in the end...all balancing out if we've done it right?...again, liked it...

creedsister · 01-11-2005, 12:28 PM

Quote: (Originally Posted by Ann Allusion) nice writing, aussie...there are some sections in there that i find humourous as well, and others that take on a serious tone...but then isn't that what living life is?....a mixture of both humourous and serious..as well as good and bad...and in the end...all balancing out if we've done it right?...again, liked it...

HR2004 · 01-12-2005, 10:06 PM

good writting

aussiecreeder · 01-12-2005, 11:07 PM

thanks everyone.....

01-09-2005, 09:50 PM	#2
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Wish i knew at birth that death is Greater, it was cool, i know it was kinda serisous, but it hit me funny, __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

01-10-2005, 02:15 AM	#4
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	I Know It, Was,ent It Just Hit Me Funny, A Lot Of Stuff Does, I That Normal Folk Would Not Find Funny, But Oh Well, I Liked It __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

01-11-2005, 12:28 PM	#6
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by Ann Allusion) nice writing, aussie...there are some sections in there that i find humourous as well, and others that take on a serious tone...but then isn't that what living life is?....a mixture of both humourous and serious..as well as good and bad...and in the end...all balancing out if we've done it right?...again, liked it... __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

01-12-2005, 10:06 PM	#7
HR2004 USER INFO » Status: Faceless Fan Posts: 455 Joined: Jun 2004 Currently: Offline	good writting __________________ Dancing around... With joy found... The music in my head loud... Joyful noises sound... Happiness surrounds...

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01-11-2005, 10:03 AM	#5
Ann Allusion USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 912 Joined: Jan 2003 Currently: Offline	nice writing, aussie...there are some sections in there that i find humourous as well, and others that take on a serious tone...but then isn't that what living life is?....a mixture of both humourous and serious..as well as good and bad...and in the end...all balancing out if we've done it right?...again, liked it...

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