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Rulesdontapply · 10-10-2004, 10:08 PM

not finished yet but i thought id share.

Another phone call that’s unreturned
Another side of my pride is burned
Cant you see that this hurts
From the kiss you pushed away
You don’t even need to say
Because ill say it first
I am so sick of this place
I cant stand my own face
And I hate that this hurts
I hate that I’m open
While You don’t even see how much you mean
How far in you’ve seen
I miss you
And I should do nothing but forget you
But I cant
So I’m left to wonder
Because Iv been replaced with another
What’s left that we can possibly be
Did you even leave any of me?
But the pain reminds me you didn’t
That we didn’t make it
And this will kill me

creedsister · 10-10-2004, 10:52 PM

I liked it i dont know what to call it

Ann Allusion · 10-10-2004, 11:06 PM

very emotional writing...a thought...what do you think of "I've Always Known"...

creedsister · 10-11-2004, 12:18 PM

that would be a nice one

HR2004 · 10-12-2004, 12:45 AM

That was a really good poem.How about "This really hurts" or "I'll miss you"
tell me what cha think.that poem again rocked

Rulesdontapply · 10-12-2004, 01:25 AM

I like "Ill miss you" , feels right. and thanks for the kind words

HR2004 · 10-12-2004, 11:27 AM

your welcome and thanx

10-10-2004, 10:08 PM	#1
Rulesdontapply USER INFO » Status: Unspoken Posts: 48 Joined: May 2004 Currently: Offline	Working title not finished yet but i thought id share. Another phone call that’s unreturned Another side of my pride is burned Cant you see that this hurts From the kiss you pushed away You don’t even need to say Because ill say it first I am so sick of this place I cant stand my own face And I hate that this hurts I hate that I’m open While You don’t even see how much you mean How far in you’ve seen I miss you And I should do nothing but forget you But I cant So I’m left to wonder Because Iv been replaced with another What’s left that we can possibly be Did you even leave any of me? But the pain reminds me you didn’t That we didn’t make it And this will kill me

10-10-2004, 10:52 PM	#2
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	I liked it i dont know what to call it __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

10-11-2004, 12:18 PM	#4
creedsister USER INFO » Status: Tree of Wisdom Posts: 8,290 Joined: Oct 2003 Currently: Offline	that would be a nice one __________________ Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything

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10-10-2004, 11:06 PM	#3
Ann Allusion USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 912 Joined: Jan 2003 Currently: Offline	very emotional writing...a thought...what do you think of "I've Always Known"...

10-12-2004, 12:45 AM	#5
HR2004 USER INFO » Status: Faceless Fan Posts: 455 Joined: Jun 2004 Currently: Offline	That was a really good poem.How about "This really hurts" or "I'll miss you" tell me what cha think.that poem again rocked

10-12-2004, 01:25 AM	#6
Rulesdontapply USER INFO » Status: Unspoken Posts: 48 Joined: May 2004 Currently: Offline	I like "Ill miss you" , feels right. and thanks for the kind words

10-12-2004, 11:27 AM	#7
HR2004 USER INFO » Status: Faceless Fan Posts: 455 Joined: Jun 2004 Currently: Offline	your welcome and thanx

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