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Old 01-24-2004, 02:43 AM   #1
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The Sacrifice

This might be my worst work yet,sorry...I just wrote it seconds ago.
I might edit it later...depends on the responses i get


"Burn the past away
Break the mold today
Forget what they told you
Their all lies,its nothing new

I'd give my life away
If only I could say
The words that could numb your pain
To wash away the tears and break away the chanes

Up to this moment all you knew was pain
But Im hear to tell you thats things are gonna change
No more chasing the pain away
No more wishing it all away

I'll give my life away
To take away the pain
I'll wash away the tears and break away the chanes

This is the sacrifice that I will do for you
That way when you pass,you can be brand new
I'd put myself upon a cross and die for you again
Just so I could be with you even after the end

I gave my life away
So you could be with me
I paid the price of death
Only for you to deny me

(Father,why do You bring death upon me?
You lied when You said You love me...I hate You!!!)

Those words you say bring tears to my eyes
I gave you life and gave you million trys
It hurts to say the words that will bring you death
You reached for me,but then cursed me with your dying breath
Thats the reason I cry,I wanted to be with you
But you wouldnt believe that what I did was true
So now I must say depart
It gives me a broken heart."


Sorry for that junk...
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Old 01-24-2004, 11:41 AM   #2
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seeks im glad i got to respond first i get upset when i dont get to be first~~But after reading that and all the spirtual emontions all flowing down it i had to grab a klenex that was killer!!!!~~so go ahead edit now in stuff i LOOOOOOOOOOOved seeks
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Old 01-24-2004, 02:58 PM   #3
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Yea,haha...thanks Ta
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Old 01-24-2004, 09:20 PM   #4
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So far I like "kill the living" the best...but this one's cool.
Very emotional....you write very well.
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Old 01-25-2004, 02:15 AM   #5
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Thanks! Did you read my others? "Thoughts of Suicide", "Hopes Fall Apart", and my favorite "Neurotic"?
I have others,those are the only one's i could thik of,hahaha
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I really like this one Kevin
This has to be one of my faves man! Awesome Job
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Old 01-25-2004, 08:48 PM   #7
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Thanks alot Julie! Im glad you liked it
The reason I didnt like this one because it didnt turn out the way i wanted it.
I wanted to write somthing about Christ's death and stuff,but this just didnt fit too well with me.
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Quote: (Originally Posted by MrSeeker) Thanks alot Julie! Im glad you liked it
The reason I didnt like this one because it didnt turn out the way i wanted it.
I wanted to write somthing about Christ's death and stuff,but this just didnt fit too well with me.
dont you hated when yhat happen but i really liked this one too it was awsome
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Anyone going to see that one movie about Christ's death? its supposed to be rated R and stuff, i want to see it
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Quote: (Originally Posted by MrSeeker) Anyone going to see that one movie about Christ's death? its supposed to be rated R and stuff, i want to see it
im sorry i havent heard about it seeks]]foregive me iam busy from time to timeLOL]]but a I Would Love Too see it yes]] i like too see whats all about then afterward set back and be the best darn crictic}]hehe]]LOL
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It think its called "The Passion of Christ" or somthing like that,Im not too sure.
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