++ Alter Bridge - Fortress ++ PreOrder NOW!!  
Go Back   CreedFeed Community > Community Central > Waxing Poetica
Today's Posts «

Post Reply
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread
Old 01-14-2007, 07:52 AM   #1
aussiecreeder
USER INFO »
Status: Rising Sun
Posts: 3,976
Joined: Mar 2004
Currently: Offline
Contact:  Send a message via AIM to aussiecreeder
As They Say Goodbye

First of all hello to everyone I have not spoken to since.....well a very long time lol. Wrote some song lyrics and thought I would share. I would like some constructive critcism if anyone has any.


Favourite song played,vision of the casket carried away
Breathe the last, one last look above
Regret in hesitation
Words said in desolation
Fonder memories of the road a young woman paved
Your light shining upon the way

Many fish in the sea or so they say
Only one for me, caught one fateful day
As they say goodbye, tell them to shed no tears
Had all a man could ask, when you uttered yes to me that glorious day

Conversation in silence
Far from an abomination
Redundant words said
You were fair and young
And though your rose has faded
It matters not to me

You were always right
In your eyes and mine
All that matters now is I utter those words
That have taken my whole life to find

Discourse with the animals was always your way
Father nature has its own religion
No man chooses when he crashes his last wave

So I go as the chorus plays
Thoughts so hollow as the tears flow
As the church bells ring now
It may seem silly
To believe in something I cannot know
I know this is just goodbye for now
__________________
She never told a lie,
Well, might of told a lie.
But never lived one.
Didn’t have a life.
Didn’t have a life.
But surely saved one.
Alright, now it’s time for us to let you go.

Tool
Wings for Marie
Reply With Quote
Old 01-16-2007, 11:16 PM   #2
HeavensOnFire
HeavensOnFire's Avatar
USER INFO »
Status: Wound Up
Posts: 1,070
Joined: Oct 2006
Currently: Offline
Re: As They Say Goodbye

I found this strong potery of more than passion but strong in expeticting and learning ones nature has they grow and when they fade to and fro , i love the revealing structure in this one, and i loved and like worshpied the engraving of the depth structure, of it it stayed in a strong balance for mat like in the depths of the need and the heart of the writer, very un like your other wrtings, that spoke of parables of so much human nature and parables, and trying to avoid the deep issuies, damn haaaaaaaaaaa you are amazing writer,
__________________
When NO One Else Can Understand Me When Everything I Do Is Wrong You Give Hope And Consolation You Give Me Strength To Carry On, And Your Always There To Lend A Hand In Everything I Do That The Wonder The WONDER Of You And When You Smile The World Is Brighter YOU Touch My Hand And Im Queen Your KISS To Me Is Worth A Fourtune Your Love For Me Is Everything I,ll Guess I,ll Never Know The Reason Why You Love As You Do Thats Just The Wonder The Wonder Of You
Reply With Quote
Old 01-17-2007, 11:35 AM   #3
Dogstar
Forum Diplomat
Dogstar's Avatar
USER INFO »
Status: Young Grown Old
Posts: 21,345
Joined: Sep 2002
Currently: Offline
Re: As They Say Goodbye

Nice job, hide! And nice to see you around.
__________________
Silly monkeys give them thumbs
they make a club and beat their brother down.
How they survive so misguided is a mystery.
Reply With Quote
Old 01-22-2007, 11:42 PM   #4
HeavensOnFire
HeavensOnFire's Avatar
USER INFO »
Status: Wound Up
Posts: 1,070
Joined: Oct 2006
Currently: Offline
Re: As They Say Goodbye

this was good stuff man you should have done a copyright, but i loved it,
__________________
When NO One Else Can Understand Me When Everything I Do Is Wrong You Give Hope And Consolation You Give Me Strength To Carry On, And Your Always There To Lend A Hand In Everything I Do That The Wonder The WONDER Of You And When You Smile The World Is Brighter YOU Touch My Hand And Im Queen Your KISS To Me Is Worth A Fourtune Your Love For Me Is Everything I,ll Guess I,ll Never Know The Reason Why You Love As You Do Thats Just The Wonder The Wonder Of You
Reply With Quote
Post Reply


Currently Active Users Viewing This Thread: 1 (0 members and 1 guests)
 
Thread Tools Search this Thread
Search this Thread:

Advanced Search

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump

Similar Threads
Thread Thread Starter Forum Replies Last Post
Random Lyrics SmilinSkullRing Music Matters 68 12-21-2004 12:12 AM
Goodbye To Fans cyndeelouwho Chat-O-Rama 3 09-11-2004 08:13 AM
hey guys i know my last poem was "goodbye" but i realize i cant say goodbye so enjoy. HR2004 Waxing Poetica 8 07-02-2004 07:13 PM
The Goodbye Affect MrSeeker Waxing Poetica 3 06-22-2004 11:16 PM


All times are GMT -4. The time now is 01:53 PM.

Powered by vBulletin Version 3.5.2
Copyright ©2000 - 2024, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.
Copyright © 2004 Steve Caponetto. All Rights Reserved.