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Old 05-14-2004, 10:54 PM   #1
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Cold Embrace

"Dont look at me, Im just a scar from the past
Im just a blemish on your beautiful painting
I've been told to sell my soul
I'll never do such a thing to hurt you
Blanket me in your cold embrace
Just like years past
When you brought a smile to my face
Those days burned away like fire
Like a soft breeze that blows away the pain
The ground covered in blood
Such a beautiful stain
My heart is ready to be broken again
Painted black from the tears of the fallen
Carried out until the end

Im ready to be made new
Im ready to be with you
My soul is reaching
My body, Im leaving."
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Old 05-14-2004, 10:56 PM   #2
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Wow, excellent job, Mr.Seeker...Really good visuals...

Love the opening lines best:
Dont look at me, Im just a scar from the past
Im just a blemish on your beautiful painting

And the ending is really strong, too!
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Old 05-14-2004, 11:04 PM   #3
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Thanks! Its a poem, not like my usual stuff. Im glad you like it
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Old 05-14-2004, 11:09 PM   #4
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i liked it
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything
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