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Old 07-06-2004, 02:31 AM   #1
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Breakdown

I cannot fault you
For running away
I cannot blame you
For not wanting to stay
I shattered your final threshold of pain
I pushed you over and crushed what remained

Wash me away like blood from your hands
Banish me to the cellar of your soul
I am not worthy of a place in your heart
I will only work to tear you apart

I cannot fault you
For trusting in me
I cannot blame you
For believing in me
I broke your will when I fell yet again
I killed your hope when I let the devil win

Dust me off your virgin marble table
Blow me away from your cracked window sill
I am not worthy of a place in your heart
I will only work to break you apart
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Old 07-06-2004, 03:05 AM   #2
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Great job Kerri, I really liked the last stanza.
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Old 07-06-2004, 03:22 AM   #3
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Many thanks, Creed_Defaultgirl!
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Old 07-06-2004, 06:12 AM   #4
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) I broke your will when I fell yet again
I killed your hope when I let the devil win

That is one powerful statement. Outstanding job Kerri. You should definitely be published, girl.
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Old 07-06-2004, 09:58 AM   #5
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Have to go with Teri here. Great work , Kerri. Sounds a little Maynardish( ) to me.
Very strong, emotional words!
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Old 07-06-2004, 10:44 AM   #6
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LOL @ Maynardish (it sounds like a condiment, hehehe)...thank you, ladies. As always, you are too kind!
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Old 07-06-2004, 10:46 AM   #7
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) LOL @ Maynardish (it sounds like a condiment, hehehe).=


ROTFLMFAO!!!! A condiment ,huh!! You are too much!!
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Old 07-06-2004, 10:48 AM   #8
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...Like a cross between mayo/relish...I'm just leaving it at that...my mind is going in naughty places
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Old 07-06-2004, 10:51 AM   #9
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Well, when it comes to Maynard my mind always wanders in dirty places.

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Old 07-06-2004, 10:54 AM   #10
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Hahahahaha, same here!!! GREAT avie! :drool:
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Old 07-06-2004, 12:56 PM   #11
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Creed_Defaultgirl) Great job Kerri, I really liked the last stanza.
Thats the part i liked too, Great Title Too
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Thank you kindly, creedsister!
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Old 07-06-2004, 08:19 PM   #13
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) ...Like a cross between mayo/relish...I'm just leaving it at that

LOL, I was thinking the same thing.

Great poem, Kerri.

I agree with Terri and Kris, you should be published.
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Old 07-15-2004, 07:29 PM   #14
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wow good job
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Old 07-15-2004, 11:39 PM   #15
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does kinda have a "Sober" feel to it...lol...some nice writing, dogstar...
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