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11-07-2005, 10:43 PM
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Crack The Whip (my poem)
I stole the ending from Creed but I can always cut it out....but the rest is me...
Crack The Whip Caught in the crossfire I struggle through Frantic, faction, focus guides me too Death so near everything goes black Only a small light shines The nightmare continues as we dodge bullets fired by our enemies We can’t dodge them forever Darkness envelops the week The strong continue to seek The hope, we search, we try, we cry Wandering unknowingly through a maze Our life clouded in a haze Mist and sorrows We struggle with the thoughts of peril and death I walk down a dark alley A streetlight miles away Here the shadows conceal the terror I walk slowly and somberly through Sad eyes follow me I don’t know what to do There are always the questions Yes the questions What if? What if I? What if your words could be judged like a crime?
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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11-07-2005, 11:12 PM
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you also stole the frantic faction focus as well from say I
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11-07-2005, 11:14 PM
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oh your good....lol... sorry but my inspiration is them, but hello, can you think of a better line to go with that? lol, it's not like I plan on selling it, dang all of you like Creed as much as I do *bows down to you* heaven thank you for sending me a forum with obsessed people like me, I LOVE Say I!!!!!! lol
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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11-08-2005, 12:01 AM
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Awww it was precious CAUGHT UP IN THE CROSSFIRE Frantic focus guides me too death so near everything goes black ONLY A SMALL LIGHT SHINES, Sad Eyes Follow Me There Is Always Questions i dont know what todo I liked it
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11-08-2005, 12:06 AM
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thanks....my friends thought it was dark, lol
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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11-08-2005, 12:20 AM
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well yes but not that much i liked your small light verse thats all we need is a gimpse and spark of light to gives us hope and Light Bright Light Bright Lol the darkness Like You said in the opening Its a to and fro thing... Like being caught up in the Crossfire , i liked your poem sweetie its all you and what you love and thats all that matters thanks for sharing it
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I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done |
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11-08-2005, 12:25 AM
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*shrugs* lol I just wrote it in Mr. Davis's math class...grr pre-algebra is way too boring, especially scientific notation, lol.... everybody says I should be a writer but I preffer acting, my hero is Raven Symone, lol, and this poem is kinda me, but me likes egypt and stuff like that.... I never really noticed anything about the poem, I just like it cause it rhymes and it flows, unlike my other pathetic attempts on poetry, lol...when I was in 5th grade I made a (what's it called) uhm ,the funny poetry, which mine was just stupid, lol...after that I kind of stayed away from poetry, until math class *shakes head*
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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11-08-2005, 12:39 AM
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oh your sooooooooooo raven haaaaaaaaaa i never wrote when i was kid i just had a big imagination i started around 11 or 12 i guess the same year i started smoking ...I Just Wanted New Kids On The Block To Die And The Wonder Years To be cancled From Tv
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I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done |
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11-08-2005, 12:55 AM
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*thinks about Scott Stapp* you know the song your always on my mind? lol scott stapp is.... lol
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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11-08-2005, 01:17 AM
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***i know the song***
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I Indeed Babtize you with water BUT ONE Mightier Than I Cometh The Latchet Of Whose Shoes I,am Not Worthy To Unloose He Shall Babtize You With The Holy Ghost And With FIREEEEEEEEEE John The Babtist You Never Count Your Money When YOUR Sittin At The Table There Will Be Time Enough To Count,em When The Dealings Done |
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11-08-2005, 01:19 AM
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lol.... I just want a big mural of him on the ceiling, lol
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SURROUND ME They say no man’s an island but I tend to disagree I guess they’ve never seen my island, And where it lies at sea A wounded man sounds desperate when he’s lost all his belief Can you look into my eyes and say you won’t betray me Tabula Rasa from The Dark Poet! |
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