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04-10-2006, 07:13 PM | #1 |
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need help with a title
ok heres the deal I wrote this for a girl I went on a date with recently and I told her I wrote a poem to cheer her up yesterday but that ill save it for a rainy day since she is happy again. she blogged about being deppressed and not meeting her goals to play the piano, have a boyfreind, have her first kiss etc by her 19th birthday. Now Im a little concerned though that this will come across as a love poem and or creep her out. any suggestions for a title or what I should do about the situation.
You've written a script of how your life shoul be contemplative you cry knowing your not following it erasing some names changing some themes with another year to have it complete a masterpeice takes time let it rest it will come together to rush is to turn authorship over to desperate frustration and he writes only tradgedy You cast it in the fire to burn like your desire burns you when unmet Id reach my hand in if I could peice together your dreams but id never read it cause its yours alone to see |
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: man i call it the freaking mona Lisa, A Master Piece Takes Time Let It Rest It Will Come Together to rush is to turn authorship over to a desperete frustration and he writes only tragdey love it man
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hope she will as well but honestly it will probly creep her out unless it doesnt come across as a love poem
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yes i would 100 percent absoultey agree it would creep a hers out But I Loved it right down to closing lines there
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04-11-2006, 12:17 AM | #5 |
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your not supposed to agree. so should i not share it with her then
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04-11-2006, 12:28 AM | #6 |
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man just go ahead and she should take it as something very speciale not your everyday hallmark potery ...if she does not like it or get it there is something wrong with that girl ya,lls and if shes happy now she should love reading something like that
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Re: need help with a title
how bout "The undeciphered"
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you guys with your fancy words whats it mean
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THIS REALLY DOES NEED TITLE, !!!!! ITS WORTHY OF ONE !!! See Now SIS Knows What Im Talking About!!!!
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