The Serpent

Dogstar · 01-05-2004, 03:51 AM

What more do you want
I’m spent
Insatiable thirst
Can’t quench
You go to the well again
I’m dry
Bottomless desire
Drains me

Can’t feed your hunger
I’m poor
Bloated leeches
Can’t shake
You gloat high and mighty
I’m low
Corporate sword
Strikes me

Someday when you’re not looking
You’ll get what’s coming
Snake bit and unable to fight
You’ll wish you had done me right

You think you know me
I’m shackled
Oppressive mentor
Can’t hide
You cast your bloodstained web
I’m trapped
Self-serving master
Depletes me

Are you happy now
I’m gone
Relentless chase
Can’t win
You crush a willing soldier
I’m wounded
Black days and nights
Consume me

Someday when you’re not looking
You’ll get what’s coming
Snake bit and unable to fight
You’ll wish you had done me right

hide · 01-05-2004, 03:59 AM

You think you know me
I’m shackled
Oppressive mentor
Can’t hide
You cast your bloodstained web
I’m trapped
Self-serving master
Depletes me

Are you happy now
I’m gone
Relentless chase
Can’t win
You crush a willing soldier
I’m wounded
Black days and nights
Consume me

i really like these two verses another good job! Dark, Angry yet eloquent good stuff!

Check my Disease post about the DSL CD!

Dogstar · 01-05-2004, 04:06 AM

Thanks, hide... I've been a little ticked off at my boss of late

...hehehe, better to express it this way than saying some things that could get me in trouble or fired, hehehe...

Quote: Check my Disease post about the DSL CD!

Done!

hide · 01-05-2004, 04:09 AM

[quote=Dogstar]Thanks, hide... I've been a little ticked off at my boss of late

...hehehe, better to express it this way than saying some things that could get me in trouble or fired, hehehe...

Cool and yes that is a great idea i'm sure you like having gas and electricity! LOL That poem could equally apply to one of my housemates who to be nice isn't doing his fair share.

Dogstar · 01-05-2004, 04:13 AM

Quote: (Originally Posted by hide) Cool and yes that is a great idea i'm sure you like having gas and electricity! LOL That poem could equally apply to one of my housemates who to be nice isn't doing his fair share.

Hahahah, yeah, I'm liking my gas and electricity...too funny...That's so cool that it could apply to your housemate. I'm hoping my writing, though inspired by something specific, can apply to more than what I was thinking about. Does that make any sense, hehe? It's 4:10 a.m. and I'm surprised my brain cells are still functioning...

hide · 01-05-2004, 04:23 AM

Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) Hahahah, yeah, I'm liking my gas and electricity...too funny...That's so cool that it could apply to your housemate. I'm hoping my writing, though inspired by something specific, can apply to more than what I was thinking about. Does that make any sense, hehe? It's 4:10 a.m. and I'm surprised my brain cells are still functioning...

4:10 am? wo don't you have to work for that tyant tomorrow? LOL It's always good when someone can apply it to a different situation then what is was intended for. Strange how when you write something it is so clear to you but others can interept it to mean something different.

Dogstar · 01-05-2004, 04:27 AM

Yeah, that's what I love about writing! I work nights anyway, hehehe, but I do have tomorrow and Tuesday off. Those are my regular days off...It's already Monday where you are, though, right? It's technically Monday a.m., but it's really not *tomorrow* until I've gone to bed

. So in my mind, it's still Sunday night.

hide · 01-05-2004, 04:43 AM

Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) Yeah, that's what I love about writing! I work nights anyway, hehehe, but I do have tomorrow and Tuesday off. Those are my regular days off...It's already Monday where you are, though, right? It's technically Monday a.m., but it's really not *tomorrow* until I've gone to bed

. So in my mind, it's still Sunday night.

you work nights how is it sleeping during the day? Its nearly 9:00 P:M Monday night here!

Dogstar · 01-05-2004, 04:47 AM

I'm used to it. Never have been much of a morning person...I typically go to bed between 4 and 5 and get up between 11 a.m. and noon...

TeriB19 · 01-05-2004, 06:07 AM

I knew exactly what the source of this one was!! Great expression, Kerri!!!

Torn Signs · 01-05-2004, 08:08 AM

Awesome job, keep it up!

Aimee · 01-05-2004, 09:38 AM

Damn Girl, that's awesome! So when does band practice start???

Dogstar · 01-05-2004, 11:30 AM

LMAO, Aimee, thanks!

Quote: I knew exactly what the source of this one was!!

I figured you see right through that one, Teri

...Yeah, I still want to eat, so better rant this way, LOL.

Thanks much, Torn signs!

njcreedite · 01-05-2004, 12:02 PM

"Someday when you’re not looking
You’ll get what’s coming
Snake bit and unable to fight
You’ll wish you had done me right"

Can't you just hear James Hetfield (Metallica)
doing his trademark growl and evil laugh?

Way Cool Dogstar.

Dogstar · 01-05-2004, 12:07 PM

Hehehehe, thanks, njcreedite!!!

01-05-2004, 03:51 AM	#1
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	The Serpent What more do you want I’m spent Insatiable thirst Can’t quench You go to the well again I’m dry Bottomless desire Drains me Can’t feed your hunger I’m poor Bloated leeches Can’t shake You gloat high and mighty I’m low Corporate sword Strikes me Someday when you’re not looking You’ll get what’s coming Snake bit and unable to fight You’ll wish you had done me right You think you know me I’m shackled Oppressive mentor Can’t hide You cast your bloodstained web I’m trapped Self-serving master Depletes me Are you happy now I’m gone Relentless chase Can’t win You crush a willing soldier I’m wounded Black days and nights Consume me Someday when you’re not looking You’ll get what’s coming Snake bit and unable to fight You’ll wish you had done me right __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-05-2004, 03:59 AM	#2
hide USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 919 Joined: Feb 2003 Currently: Offline	You think you know me I’m shackled Oppressive mentor Can’t hide You cast your bloodstained web I’m trapped Self-serving master Depletes me Are you happy now I’m gone Relentless chase Can’t win You crush a willing soldier I’m wounded Black days and nights Consume me i really like these two verses another good job! Dark, Angry yet eloquent good stuff! Check my Disease post about the DSL CD! __________________ come on all you PJ loving Creeders come and look and also post at the busiest and funniest board around (excluding here of course LOL) http://forums.pearljam.com

01-05-2004, 04:06 AM	#3
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Thanks, hide... I've been a little ticked off at my boss of late ...hehehe, better to express it this way than saying some things that could get me in trouble or fired, hehehe... Quote: Check my Disease post about the DSL CD! Done! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-05-2004, 04:09 AM	#4
hide USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 919 Joined: Feb 2003 Currently: Offline	[quote=Dogstar]Thanks, hide... I've been a little ticked off at my boss of late ...hehehe, better to express it this way than saying some things that could get me in trouble or fired, hehehe... Cool and yes that is a great idea i'm sure you like having gas and electricity! LOL That poem could equally apply to one of my housemates who to be nice isn't doing his fair share. __________________ come on all you PJ loving Creeders come and look and also post at the busiest and funniest board around (excluding here of course LOL) http://forums.pearljam.com

01-05-2004, 04:13 AM	#5
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by hide) Cool and yes that is a great idea i'm sure you like having gas and electricity! LOL That poem could equally apply to one of my housemates who to be nice isn't doing his fair share. Hahahah, yeah, I'm liking my gas and electricity...too funny...That's so cool that it could apply to your housemate. I'm hoping my writing, though inspired by something specific, can apply to more than what I was thinking about. Does that make any sense, hehe? It's 4:10 a.m. and I'm surprised my brain cells are still functioning... __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-05-2004, 04:23 AM	#6
hide USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 919 Joined: Feb 2003 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) Hahahah, yeah, I'm liking my gas and electricity...too funny...That's so cool that it could apply to your housemate. I'm hoping my writing, though inspired by something specific, can apply to more than what I was thinking about. Does that make any sense, hehe? It's 4:10 a.m. and I'm surprised my brain cells are still functioning... 4:10 am? wo don't you have to work for that tyant tomorrow? LOL It's always good when someone can apply it to a different situation then what is was intended for. Strange how when you write something it is so clear to you but others can interept it to mean something different. __________________ come on all you PJ loving Creeders come and look and also post at the busiest and funniest board around (excluding here of course LOL) http://forums.pearljam.com

01-05-2004, 04:27 AM	#7
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Yeah, that's what I love about writing! I work nights anyway, hehehe, but I do have tomorrow and Tuesday off. Those are my regular days off...It's already Monday where you are, though, right? It's technically Monday a.m., but it's really not tomorrow until I've gone to bed . So in my mind, it's still Sunday night. __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-05-2004, 04:43 AM	#8
hide USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 919 Joined: Feb 2003 Currently: Offline	Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) Yeah, that's what I love about writing! I work nights anyway, hehehe, but I do have tomorrow and Tuesday off. Those are my regular days off...It's already Monday where you are, though, right? It's technically Monday a.m., but it's really not tomorrow until I've gone to bed . So in my mind, it's still Sunday night. you work nights how is it sleeping during the day? Its nearly 9:00 P:M Monday night here! __________________ come on all you PJ loving Creeders come and look and also post at the busiest and funniest board around (excluding here of course LOL) http://forums.pearljam.com

01-05-2004, 04:47 AM	#9
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	I'm used to it. Never have been much of a morning person...I typically go to bed between 4 and 5 and get up between 11 a.m. and noon... __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

01-05-2004, 06:07 AM	#10
TeriB19 Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Saving Grace Posts: 12,439 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	I knew exactly what the source of this one was!! Great expression, Kerri!!! __________________ MK: We're never gonna have the Super Bowl of Scott Stapp vs. Myles Kennedy in a sing-off - it's ridiculous. SP: Actually, we are setting that up. MT: It was in your contract when you signed up with us.

01-05-2004, 09:38 AM	#12
Aimee USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 822 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Damn Girl, that's awesome! So when does band practice start???

01-05-2004, 11:30 AM	#13
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	LMAO, Aimee, thanks! Quote: I knew exactly what the source of this one was!! I figured you see right through that one, Teri ...Yeah, I still want to eat, so better rant this way, LOL. Thanks much, Torn signs! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery. Last edited by Dogstar : 01-05-2004 at 11:54 AM.

01-05-2004, 12:02 PM	#14
njcreedite USER INFO » Status: INK'ed Posts: 808 Joined: Jan 2003 Currently: Offline	"Someday when you’re not looking You’ll get what’s coming Snake bit and unable to fight You’ll wish you had done me right" Can't you just hear James Hetfield (Metallica) doing his trademark growl and evil laugh? Way Cool Dogstar. __________________ eddie vedder quote:: We were both singers. Chris Cornell The first time we played he came to this little club and he told me that it was really good and he was thankful that I was there and that I was who I was, or something really nice, but the whole time he was saying this, he didn't realize but he was standing under a black light, and his teeth were glowing and his eyes were glowing. I remember it as my first conversation with Satan ..."

01-05-2004, 12:07 PM	#15
Dogstar Forum Diplomat USER INFO » Status: Young Grown Old Posts: 21,345 Joined: Sep 2002 Currently: Offline	Hehehehe, thanks, njcreedite!!! __________________ Silly monkeys give them thumbs they make a club and beat their brother down. How they survive so misguided is a mystery.

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