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05-11-2004, 08:12 PM | #1 |
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After the Fall
Lost my way again
Dazed and confused Desires exposed Unable to refuse In a sea of black I buck the tide Layers exposed Unable to hide I kneel before you now Hat in hand I give it all to you Help me let go My hands betray me Broken and worn Fault lines exposed Unable to mourn Here I am again Low and contrite Intent exposed Unable to fight I kneel before you now Hat in hand I give it all to you Help me let go
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I liked this one Dogstar, it sounds like from the writers point of view they have a lot of trust in the person its too It Cool
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything |
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Oh And I really Got into this, Line In A sea Of Black i buck the tide layers exposed unable to hide
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything |
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Thanks much, creedsister. I'm glad you liked it .
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that is very good once again, seems like an inner conflict perhaps a forbidden relationship or that could be a metaphor for something else. you want to give in but you know you shouldn't, heart saids one thing, logic saids another. which do you listen to? am i even close? lol
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NO it does not sound like forbidden relationship to me, it sounds like a long one, to me thats been through alot,and a strong one it seems, but of course that is just my opion,
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Thanks, hide...and yeah, like Layne Staley said. The song is whatever you think it's about....conflict is involved, though .
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Wow! I really like this one! What I got was that you kinda felt inside out, like you gave in and then all of your inner feelings were exposed to someone. Just my point of view, though.
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Thanks a bunch, Creed_Defaulgirl! I like that people get different things out what I write. That's what makes it so interesting. All these different perspectives and interpretations. Very cool observation there!
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Yeah, I like reading what everyone else has to say about it too. You can go back up and look, and just say, hey, that's a way different way to look at whatever happens to be the subject.
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Getting caught up with all your poems. Another beautiful one. I don't know what else to see but beautiful and very emotional!
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Hehehehe, nice to see you around again, Kris, and thanks as always!
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