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Old 03-15-2010, 03:38 AM   #1
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Midnight Lovers

Hello, my name is Jason, and I am glad to be here with fellow Creed fans. These are two of my poems.

1) Midnight Lovers

Two midnight lovers by the lake
The moonlight dances across the crystal water
I savor the taste from your luscious lips
And softly caress your beautiful hips
Warm velvet skin moves across me

Forever seems so far away
While lying in your lover’s arms

My heart is an elegant cathedral
Exquisite designs of romance
Decorate the walls and the ceiling
Down the hallway, I hear angelic voices
Singing of priceless love

Your Judas Kiss was soft and tender
Betrayed by a seductive Aquarius
With lips blood red and nefarious
Pain and punishment are vicarious

My heart is a brothel
A revolving door of lost souls
Foreign lips and a stranger’s hips
Cold scaly skin moves across me

Whether in celestial spheres
Or circles of the inferno
The concept of forever
Has become crystal clear
Outside of your arms

2) Insomnia

Romance awakens the unconscious
And in heartbreak it never sleeps
An insomnia of revelations
Shattered promises, we swore to keep

Paper tigers and Icarus wings
Fly to the sun, when the siren sings
Oedipus eyes to navigate the maze
False bravado, caught in the minotaur’s gaze

Your Prometheus Kiss
Stole the fire from my heart
The eagle is my friend
But you tear me apart

Luscious lips and Freudian slips
Red herrings lead me into your arms
Denial is the architect of illusion
On a night of cold truth
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Old 03-16-2010, 09:51 AM   #2
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Re: Midnight Lovers

well wrote indeed it puts a smile on my face ya,alls to see some of our beautiful poets share their stuff i really liked these lines all though i loved the entire piece Romance Awakens, The Unconscious And In Heartbreak It Never Sleeps i can feel the heartbreak that never sleeps ...in those lines An insomnia of revelations shattered promises we swore to keep loved those lines Kick Ass Job BLESSINGS AND STRENETH AND PEACE BE WITH US ALL IN JESUS NAME welcome aboard fellow creed fan
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Old 03-16-2010, 08:48 PM   #3
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Re: Midnight Lovers

Thank you very much for the kind feedback. I truly appreciate it.
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Old 03-18-2010, 03:11 PM   #4
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Re: Midnight Lovers

Quote: (Originally Posted by jabble524) Thank you very much for the kind feedback. I truly appreciate it.
your welcome with deep potery i like to revice more than one way but to explore every word midnight Lovers is a romantic piece indeed but as i,ve read it from so many diffrent boundries there is so much to explore from one visual or prespective to another thats why im Big Creed And Ab Fan Cuz I Just LOVE It Yippy Doging Those Bulletts pleasure was all mine enjoyed reading it Peace be with you
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Old 03-20-2010, 01:37 AM   #5
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Re: Midnight Lovers

I agree, that all art is in the eye of the beholder. Because everyone will interpret art through their own perspectives, opinions, experiences, etc.
This is another poem of mine.

Awake

As I approach the portal, between consciousness and sleep
I smell the romantic aroma of peach mango scented candles
The sweet fragrance of burning apple cinnamon incense
And intoxicating cherry vanilla perfume, drifting across from the other side

When I crossover into dreams
I hear serpents and scoundrels, speaking in tongues
Sirens singing of carnal delights, for shipwrecked sailors
And a seductive symphony of unconscious desires

I see bright yellow eyes, glowing in the summer moonlight
The reaper and father time playing chess, one of them nearing checkmate
The Phoenix rising from the ashes, of forgotten senses
And vibrant colors of red, orange, blue, pink, and purple

I feel cold hands reaching out from the shadows
Warm breath on the back of my neck, my hairs standing on end
Smooth velvet skin crawling beneath silk sheets
And wet tongues that slither slowly across my chest

At an elegant banquet, I dine on the finest ambrosia
A flavorful assortment of tastes, with sweet spices and marinades
Lobster tails and crab legs, smoked salmon, glazed shrimp, and filet mignon
Cooked vegetables, forbidden fruit, cheesecake with caramel, and white wine

Across the crowded ballroom, and through a maze of forgettable faces
I see a beautiful woman in a black sequined dress
She has soft white skin and long auburn hair
Red fingernails and a radiant smile, behind crimson lipstick

Her eyes are mysterious and mesmerizing
The right one is light blue
And the left one is dark green
Neither seem confined by mortality, or concerned with time

After a few moments she notices my transfixed gaze
And our eyes meet in a moment of unconscious destiny
Then she smiles seductively, and confidently walks towards me
As she approaches, I can smell her intoxicating perfume
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Old 03-21-2010, 10:08 PM   #6
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Re: Midnight Lovers

her eyes are mysterious and mesmerizing the right one is light blue, and the left one is dark green thats cool, neither seem confined by mortality, or concerned with time i liked those lines thanks for sharing AWAKE it was really beautiful with a twist of strange delight
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Old 03-22-2010, 12:40 AM   #7
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Thanks. I truly appreciate your kind feedback.
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Old 03-23-2010, 10:06 AM   #8
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Quote: (Originally Posted by jabble524) Thanks. I truly appreciate your kind feedback.
your welcome pleasure.... is all mine its been a while and since anyone has shared any of their stuff so its kinda nice to read i like your style and visions and letting creating vibes and minds come together in a poetic sympathy i do try to give update feed back on everybodys stuff i really love the color contrast you used in the piece if you were of those poets who uses and paints colors and visons with words but what i indulge in from this piece well both pieces again is the way You Used Colors With Colors And Brighter Colors With Out Using The Words Of Colors And with midnightlovers you used a hint of darkness with a domanating overlay of boldness so i liked how you put that one together indeed
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Old 03-27-2010, 10:04 AM   #9
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Re: Midnight Lovers

That's actually exactly how I think about writing: painting pictures with words. Something that definitely has to be seen, not just read.

Kisses Indicate

I can leave the place where time stops
Just outside reality
I can leave the place where time stops
Material paradise vanishes

Censored screams whispered
They’re spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There’s correlations between your lacerations

Watch the sunrise
And fall asleep in your arms
Strawberry kisses at sunset
And wake me from my dreams

Censored screams whispered
They’re spectacular with the vernacular of confusion
Kisses indicate the illusion
There’s correlations between your lacerations

Dragon Fire Kisses

You re-hydrate my heart
And give me a soul inside
All I ever want is your love

I can look into your eyes
And gaze into a mystical paradise
All I ever want is your love

With lips like the smooth ocean current
Pulling my loneliness out to sea
With kisses like a dragon’s fire
Burning away all my depression

All I ever want is your love
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Old 03-29-2010, 04:07 PM   #10
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Re: Midnight Lovers

yes indeed all real poets know for that matter we are painting a vison with wordsso we are trying to look at what the eyes are seeing and trying to say and paint........ i like your opening lines I CAN leave the place where time stops MATERIAL PARADISE VANISHES i really liked those lines as it richly increased and soared through the entire piece
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Old 03-29-2010, 10:27 PM   #11
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Re: Midnight Lovers

Thanks. I appreciate you being so kind to always read and offer feedback. I think at some point the material paradise has to vanish for everyone in order to find true happiness. Not to say that money or material things are evil, but learning to put them in perspective, by realizing that love is what's truly valuable.
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Old 03-31-2010, 11:01 AM   #12
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Quote: (Originally Posted by jabble524) Thanks. I appreciate you being so kind to always read and offer feedback. I think at some point the material paradise has to vanish for everyone in order to find true happiness. Not to say that money or material things are evil, but learning to put them in perspective, by realizing that love is what's truly valuable.
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AMEN AND AMEN If You Foucus on it Thats Excaltey What It Wants You To do And Is The Heart Of The Conflict We All Fight you know they come that time we all singing the best things in our life free my sacrasim does not come across to clear but anyway you get the point There Is A Deep Prespective you can let it consoume you I Believe In THIS The Good Lord SUPPLIES Our Needs But I,ve for one out growed my wants And If We are in a thinking mode as the world thinks about money about things It Robs Us From Our Spitrual Blessings And I Believe God Works Everything Not By What We Think We Should Need Praise Jesus BUT By What He Knows We Need you can open up the parables on the kingdom of God your very much welcome i do try
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Old 04-07-2010, 11:19 AM   #13
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Re: Midnight Lovers

Phantoms

Saw myself reflected in you
Thought I could stop my pain
By being your tourniquet

Tried so hard, to keep our cravings
From carving their way into consciousness
But they severed our serenity
And divorced our love from trust

Denial taught me how to lie
Found clever places
To hide from my shadow
And slip into illusion

Enchanted by envy
And enamored with vanity
Hubris led us down the spiral
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Old 04-07-2010, 09:42 PM   #14
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Re: Midnight Lovers

Very well written a bold piece i see of 2 tourniquets Denial taught me how to lie found clever places to hide from my shadow and slip into illusion i,ll tell ya what i love about this piece it brings up a reflection of a piece of us all and tourniquets from estranged tides casting to and fro in our lifes thank you so much for sharing with us but praise jesus The healer and replenisher hides not from our phatoms he will ya pull you right through the spiral and madness that was so beautiful in those in outs of boundries peace be with you
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Old 04-12-2010, 01:11 AM   #15
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Thanks for the kind feedback. In reflection, is where we often find the secrets to life.
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