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Old 12-28-2003, 07:19 PM   #1
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Tears of Joy

Sorry Dogstar "girls girls girls" didn't exactly come out in this one maybe next time! LOL you guys might notice by slight use of ripping off what are you going to do sue me? hehe Hopefully this makes you think and perhaps smile once or twice!

As we said goodbye to a friend
My brother this was your life
Is it selfish to wish you were here
With us, not them please tell me this is not the end

As we said goodbye
Mixed streams ran down
The gourges that represent our faces
This salt gave rise to wine
Friend here is a tribute to you
It was a pleasure serving with you

You were sitting amongst us
Re-telling old stories, shedding tears of joy
They are but a drop in the ocean
As are our lives
We are but grass
That tomorrow forgets
Reedem the days my son
For the days are evil
Where does your treasure lie?

So as you sat amongst us
Before your spirit left where you used to dwell
Our tears came only from joy
No ill words hidden for such a rightous man
We know that if he knocked today
The only words you would hear
Well done with you I am well pleased

Would this be true of us?
What can we learn from you?
You walked the narrow path
Up the slippery hills
We shall seize the day
Not because we seek the lights
Our master is not our name

We all want to know our fate
Our future lies in front of us
But like my sister
I can't read the map
I don't believe in a god
Who laughs at our misfortune
Our path predestined
Of this I am sure

For even if these is a line in the sand
Push, don't sit that you need to strive
What is Paris Hilton doing?
Frankly I don't give a damn
Believe what you will
That is your right
But I choose to win
So I choose to fight
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Old 12-28-2003, 07:39 PM   #2
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LOL, Hide, that's OK ...

Nicely done, by the way. I especially like this part:

So as you sat amongst us
Before your spirit left where you used to dwell
Our tears came only from joy
No ill words hidden for such a rightous man
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Old 12-28-2003, 07:45 PM   #3
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) LOL, Hide, that's OK ...

Nicely done, by the way. I especially like this part:

So as you sat amongst us
Before your spirit left where you used to dwell
Our tears came only from joy
No ill words hidden for such a rightous man

cool thanks for that I think my favourite part is where I allude to the fact that girls can't read maps! LOL
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Old 12-28-2003, 07:46 PM   #4
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Heheh, I laughed at that part because I always have trouble reading maps. I've gotten much better over the years, but in my younger days, I couldn't find my way out of a paper bag trying to read a map.
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hehe i wasen't so sure if to include that part because i was tyring to make a serious point but you can't give up good jokes in the battle of the sexes! LOL
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Old 12-28-2003, 07:56 PM   #6
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LOL, oh, I know you meant it in a serious vein, but the mention of it made me think of me, which is what/whom I was laughing at .
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Old 12-28-2003, 08:00 PM   #7
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so how is boys boys boys coming along? LOL
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LMAO...not even a twinkle in my eye yet, but give me time, hehehehe...remember, I'm older...and maybe a little slower in the brain department .
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Quote: (Originally Posted by Dogstar) LMAO...not even a twinkle in my eye yet, but give me time, hehehehe...remember, I'm older...and maybe a little slower in the brain department .

LOL use that lyrical genius to comical use we could unleash a monster!
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Old 12-28-2003, 10:33 PM   #10
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Great poem, hide. And don't underestimate Dogstar, she'll have you in stitches!!
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Old 12-28-2003, 10:34 PM   #11
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Wow hide that was very deep i loved it
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Quote: (Originally Posted by hide) LOL use that lyrical genius to comical use we could unleash a monster!
Your right thats true,,
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I liked that one a lot to
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Quote: (Originally Posted by JulieLovesCreed) I liked that one a lot to

thanks heaps too bad that actor dude already wrote that arsehole song i would have love to have written that! LOL
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