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01-31-2004, 03:06 PM | #1 |
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Valley of The Damned
"I watch as angels fall to my feet
I'll use them to shield myself from the heat I used their broken wings to try and fly But crashed and burned and then began to cry I feel like just a grain of sand Here in the valley of the damned Here in this darkness I need a light A light to guide me Home Here in this darkness I feel so cold So cold and so alone I try to shield myself from the hauntings sounds As my breath slowly fades and my heart starts to pound Im running from the voices that tell me to give up I cant take it anymore,Father,please take my cup! Im just like a grain of sand Here in the valley of the damned Here in this darkness I see a light A light telling me to keep pressing on Here in this darkness I hear a voice A voice telling me soon this will all be gone ...have mercy on me I just lost sight on all that could set me free I ran away from You because I couldnt see I tried to hide because of all my selfish lies I only thought of myself and couldnt lose my pride But now I realize that none of that was worth losing life A thousand times I cried for You,but out came the knife I died a selfish death I know,I only thought of me I should have lived for You alone,for only You could set me free!!! Here in this darkness I am not alone My Father is here holding me,He will take me Home Here in this darkness I have a best friend A friend who wants to be with me until the very end." Thats my newest,hope you like it!
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Great rhyming, loved the theme, loved the rhythm is awesome. Keep it up. This is definately in the top three of urs I like the most.
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Thanks alot Kim
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I think that one's my favorite.
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Thanks alot!!!
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I really liked it hehe~~Mercy is what keeps us Really i know these things ROCK ON
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thanks alot Ta
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your welcome by the way
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Hush child I,ll tell you why you have Loved Me when you were weak you have given me unselfishly Kept you From Falling Falling everywhere But Your Kness you set me free to live my life you become my Reason To Survive The Great Divide you Set Me Free Ooh Our Love Is Beautiful Ooh isn,t This Beautiful Child It Seems You Have Been My Everything |
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Nice man. I can totally place myself right into it. This is one of your best yet. I can even hear it (in many different forms) as I read it. Awesome!!
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Thanks alot
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