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Onwards On You
In September I'll be a runner
Running away from all I don't hunger And I'm hungry for a timer So in a diner I'll be in comfort With you To slow it down Yeah it feels Like I'm on my own And it feels Like I'm all alone In the fields Of a cornerstone And the wheels They won't stop turning, no Mama said "You don't know, But you have to go." On my own, here I know I will go alone And I will strive onwards And I will thrive on you I won't battle backwards Because there's a fight in you Yeah it feels Like I'm on my own And it feels Like I'm all alone In the fields Of a cornerstone And the wheels They won't stop turning, no With the future Itching my nose
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Kwl I really liked it. I like the story that you have told and the fact you haven't overdone it on the rhyming. Nice one
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Thanks. While writing I was trying to capture a kind of mix between Third Eye Blind and U2.
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reminds me of soul A. Run Away Train And Green Days Oh Wake Me When Sept Ends... im alone in the fields of a cornerstone i really fell in those verses, something we all can relate to, reminds me also of one mine brain storms potery Floating, but yeah i liked the entire piece ....
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Thanks a lot
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your welcome as always, nagpo from alternativing wrting style and putting things together , your one of the best, man....
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