Re: 2 new songs that need critique
hmm cold. Im not sure what it is about it that sounds like them. I think its more along the lines of softer staind or seether. I like cold though could you please expound why it reminds you of cold.
take your happy pills
and an ounce of denial
to mask the pain
sustain the liar
pretend the life you live
is the life you desire
pretend the hand you hold
lifts you higher
cover your hands and feet
their bleeding red
from living in a broken home
broken glass in your bed
pretend to hold together
like the cup in your hand
pretend it fills you up
but its empty there is nothing
theres a disconnect
when your afraid to let go
a distancing from us
please come home
your decsions are your battle
but were all wounded here
listen to us now
we all care
this is your safe place
its ok to make mistakes
but to live in one is fraud
when so many create your out
when a lifes been spent to make you a safeplace
and im not sure if you listened to December but thats kinda like safe place #2 cause it continues on the same theme of family love centered around the issue of suicide. Both are about my sister and both I reference a symbolic "cup"
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