that's pretty good, actually.
But I don't see a melody fit to it unless you do some blues-ish talking. There are a few words with too many syllables: anticipated, physically, metaphorical.
Also, as another feedback: perhaps you may want to fit each line of the verses with the same number of syllables (I don't think I can spell it! I hope it's right...) to make an easier melody.
I don't know...at least I... I can't think of a melody to fit and I'm pretty good with it. Other than that, it's just poetry. Unless you post a clip of you singing it for us so we can get a clearer idea!
