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Old 11-04-2005, 10:21 AM   #1
uncertaindrumer
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Well why not post some lyrics, eh?

This is one I wrote a year ago. It has a couple rhymes I'm not proud of but overall it is pretty indicative of my style. No verse/chorus/interlude/chorus stuff because that bores me. The theme came from my sister who was trying to keep a premature baby (my now--thank God--healthy nephew) to stay in the womb for long enough to survive. Anyway, constructive criticism appreciated.


The earth shakes and the water breaks
The world seems to contract
The joyous moment anticipated
Comes without an invitation

Sometimes it seems, without redeem
That this life is far too short
For he who resides inside herself
She gives it all to give him help

Perhaps she can succeed and he can be freed
From the torment he endures
Escaping infection, gasping for breathe
He holds onto her, and what she has left

The world, so unfair, seems without a care
And what can change the scales?
Can a spirit so broken be enough?
In this journey through a metaphorical rough

No day goes by when she does not wonder why
And although that seems so cliché
Everything ever labeled as such
Started because it was needed so much

They tell no lies, hide none behind their eyes
The brutal truth is conveyed
But she bears it all with what she can
Attempting to let him become a man
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Last edited by uncertaindrumer : 11-07-2005 at 09:14 AM.
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