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Aimee 03-25-2004 04:39 PM

Take It
 
By: Amy Aumick 2004


Take this tear
Trap it as it falls from me
Find in it your reflection
Of all we could have been.

Take my hand
Small fold it in your own
Find in it your comfort
Of all we once called home.

Take this time
Wrap it up in plastic
Find in it our suffocation
And all that never lasted.

Take these words
Keep them in your pocket
Find in them some solace
Bitterness will mock them.

Take it all from me
Itís all I have to give
Find in it all weíve known
Pour it through a sieve.

Take what will never be again
Before itís all gone for good.
Did you like it? Now itís gone.
Find it again? You never could.

TeriB19 03-25-2004 05:30 PM

Oh man Amy, that is so moving. I've got tears in my eyes, it was really touching. Excellent job.

Dogstar 03-25-2004 07:13 PM

WOW, Aimee...man, that takes me somewhere for sure...I especially love these two verses:

Take this time
Wrap it up in plastic
Find in it our suffocation
And all that never lasted.

Take these words
Keep them in your pocket
Find in them some solace
Bitterness will mock them.

creedsister 03-25-2004 11:00 PM

Good one Aim I felt A lot of Emotions in that one,

SCOTTSMYMAN 03-29-2004 10:04 AM

Aimee , that was awesome!! This is my favorite verse:

~Take what will never be again
Before itís all gone for good.
Did you like it? Now itís gone.
Find it again? You never could.~

Very emotional poem. :crying:


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