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tru2mine 03-11-2003 11:30 PM

another one of my poems
 
heres another one i wrote. sometimes i like it sometimes i dont i guess it depends on what kinda mood im in.



He hates me, he makes me walk this path,
and he won't save me, he's lazy,
he says im always ok, but am i crazy,
when something goes bad, he always blames me
i pray please, but things always go wrong,
look at me strangely as if to say my mind is far gone,
the pain is strong, i sit and wonder why he betrays me,
builds me up to knock me down its like a game and he plays me,
I give up, i quit, leave me alone go away,
everyday i gotta see you, i have nothin to say,
your undefeated, your flawless, i have no shield for my protection,
my words are gone, im so empty i have lost all direction,
but you are mortal and in my heart i choose not to accept this,
cause all you are, all you really are is the image of my reflection


the style is kinda different its hard to read and make it sound right but you get the point, let me know what you think.

JulieCitySlicker 03-11-2003 11:52 PM

I liked it:P :dancing: ;)

Siana 03-14-2003 06:11 AM

me 2

HigherGirl 03-14-2003 07:17 PM

Me too...pretty good!!!!


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