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Dogstar 05-05-2004 01:50 AM

If
 
If I could I would
Do my part
Open my heart
Stoke the fire
Unleash my desire
If I could

If I could I would
Play the card
Let down my guard
Crash the wall
Answer the call
If I could

If I could I would
Cast the line
Claim what is mine
Live the dream
Capture the sunbeam
If I could

If I could I would
Proudly stand
Accept your hand
Fill the hole
Complete my soul
But I can’t

creedsister 05-05-2004 03:51 AM

well written,,,

aussiecreeder 05-05-2004 08:20 AM

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Originally Posted by creedsister
well written,,,


yep well written, it has a good structure to it.

Aimee 05-05-2004 12:06 PM

Wow. I really really like that one. I want it to be longer. Why can't the writer claim what is thiers? What holds them back?

creedsister 05-05-2004 01:18 PM

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Originally Posted by Aimee
Wow. I really really like that one. I want it to be longer. Why can't the writer claim what is thiers? What holds them back?

I dont know Aim, but i bet its a loooong story ;)

Dogstar 05-05-2004 02:20 PM

Hahahah, yeah, you could say that, creedsister ;)...Thanks for the kind words, you guys.

Ann Allusion 05-05-2004 08:45 PM

beautiful writing, dogstar...know the feeling...altho, there is always hope...ya think?...one can always have that... ;)

TeriB19 05-05-2004 09:23 PM

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Originally Posted by Aimee
Why can't the writer claim what is thiers? What holds them back?

Not enough lime in da Corona!! :drunk2: :drunk2: :cheers: :drunk2:

creedsister 05-05-2004 10:47 PM

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Originally Posted by Ann Allusion
beautiful writing, dogstar...know the feeling...altho, there is always hope...ya think?...one can always have that... ;)

HaHa like martin luther king said,,,LETS KEEP HOPE ALIVE

Dogstar 05-05-2004 11:31 PM

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Originally Posted by TeriB19
Not enough lime in da Corona!! :drunk2: :drunk2: :cheers: :drunk2:


Hehehehehehe...

Ann, yeah, I still have hope...sometimes ;). Glad you enjoyed it, though :)


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