Poem Needs A Title
 

Here's the poem I wrote about my recent hospitalization and the nurse who helped me through the ordeal. The piece lacks a title, after reading please submit suggestions for the title.

Here I lay in this bed
Shallow breathing, stats dropping
I'm close to the end
Asking my God for a second chance at life
Suddenly I open my eyes to a room covered in white

I'm tied down by hard lines, needles and cuffs
I want to scream out loud "Enough is enough!"
But I find my voice is lost
Somewhere in the distance
Pain races through my veins
Like a fish out of water
I'm broken, beat and scarred
Next I'm taken away from that white room
Back to my place of solitude
Looking to my right I see on the door
A message written for me
"Get well; big smile. Yours truly."
Followed by a handprint upon the broken glass
I feel a warm hand carress my head
I look but I see no one around
That's how I know the promise you made
"I'll always be there sincerely Ashley B."
The spirit that will always be with me
So though I'm shedding my skin
I always see your smile carved within
My heart, my soul and my spirit

Even though you're not here to hear this
I thank you from the bottom of my heart
Because of you I have a fresh start
So to you I must say
I'll see you again at APH
Farewell for now but don't forget
Whenever you find yourself lonely or upset
Remember these words and your tears will not fall
"Love, Peace... And Justice For All."

Kill Mickey Mouse,
 

Great Title, :laugh: :laugh: he is that killer in disney land, ugly kid joe found, and stay away from santa,s and all his elves, and the helping hands, with crocodile smiles, :rockon: reminded me Of TALLICAS ONE, It Was A Good Piece Of Potery, Peace Be With You In Jesus Name, GOD IS WITH US, also reminds me of a song i,ve been working on as well, :peacelove

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Praying For Ya, :) all must be well in jesus name, as im revisting threads, loves ya all,

Re: Poem Needs A Title
 

Good poem I really feel it and feel for you.

I guess the title should sum up what it's all about so something along the lines of - a few examples ...

1) helped from the edge ,
2) close to the end a helping hand,
3) saving me
4) thankyou for a seond chance
5) saved me
6) Does thanks exist if it is not received

I'll try and think of some more

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