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Dogstar 04-13-2004 01:04 AM

You and I
 
So you’re on your own now
Nothing but a faded memory
You and I

So far away from what we were
Nothing but a dusty shelf
You and I

Pull me down
Push me over
Bait me

So you tread on hopeless wish
Nothing but a broken dream
You and I

So you drain a bleeding heart
Nothing but an empty frame
You and I

Pull me down
Push me over
Hate me

So you cling to someone new
Nothing but an afterthought
You and I

So you utter another vow
Nothing but a house of cards
You and I

Pull me down
Push me over
Waste me

SmilinSkullRing 04-13-2004 02:53 AM

Pretty good! I like that! :)

I like these two lines:

So you drain a bleeding heart
Nothing but an empty frame

aussiecreeder 04-13-2004 03:40 AM

good job again i also like those same lines!

Dogstar 04-13-2004 12:53 PM

Thanks a bunch, you guys. Glad you liked it!

Aimee 04-13-2004 02:20 PM

These are great lyrics you come up with, Kerri. I might snag some when I start my little goth band ;)

Dogstar 04-13-2004 02:30 PM

LOL, thanks, Aimee!

The Lithium 04-13-2004 03:27 PM

I really liked the picture you painted me there, but if you really wanna get me to buy the picture you gotta try more rhyme next time. Don't get me wrong, I liked it, but try rhyme next time, that would be awesome!

Dogstar 04-13-2004 03:29 PM

LOL, I rhyme most of the time, so I wanted to try something different. And I think you don't always have to rhyme to paint an effective picture. But thanks for your input, Lith!

creedsister 04-13-2004 06:53 PM

I liked it Dogstar it sounds like someone Got set up for a downfall, i liked it :)

Dogstar 04-13-2004 08:51 PM

Thanks, creedsister. Glad you enjoyed it.


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