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aussiecreeder 12-07-2004 09:51 PM

Like A Dog I Return
 
Shrinking violet oh so strangely verbose
Even though you've done this to me
Like a dog I return
I can't quite figure out why
So tired of this manna
Return me to my slavish depravity

Chorus
Can't quite fill the hole
Smile at the thought of you
The music we made
My juxtaposed lover
Your yoke on the floor

Ruminate my flowers bought your soul
Your lips planted in my head
So ravenous

Verse 2
Baby I loved you, offered up
All but my life
Gaze into those big blue eyes
Totally oblivious to the smoke in mine

There was a day oh so long ago
When you were a harmless sin
Now with my conscience awakened
What someone knows?
Darkness chokes my soul
One bullet at a time

creedsister 12-07-2004 10:19 PM

:) :clap: :clap: Now Thats Some Kick Ass Writing You Gotta It GOING ONNNNNNNNNNNNNNNN :jam:

Ann Allusion 12-07-2004 11:09 PM

:clap:...nicely done...:)

creedsister 12-07-2004 11:29 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Ann Allusion
:clap:...nicely done...:)

:D Yes It Was

aussiecreeder 12-08-2004 12:47 AM

thanks....:)

Dogstar 12-08-2004 01:04 AM

Wicked cool, hide. Nice job...
Loooooved this part:

Ruminate my flowers bought your soul
Your lips planted in my head
So ravenous

aussiecreeder 12-08-2004 01:06 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dogstar
Wicked cool, hide. Nice job...
Loooooved this part:

Ruminate my flowers bought your soul
Your lips planted in my head
So ravenous


thanks and this one took a bit more work then other ones i've written. if only i could play guitar much better and sing much better lol.

Dogstar 12-08-2004 01:54 AM

I'd be happy to be able to PLAY the guitar...some day...

creedsister 12-08-2004 11:04 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dogstar
I'd be happy to be able to PLAY the guitar...some day...

Yes Me To :( But Ah Well Keepa Dreaming :D

HR2004 12-08-2004 05:44 PM

that was awesome

aussiecreeder 12-08-2004 10:42 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Dogstar
I'd be happy to be able to PLAY the guitar...some day...


i'm learning but i'm not very good lol

hayley 12-23-2004 09:51 PM

Ooh I found one! :D

Wow, that was really good, reminds me a little of PJ's Garden. Well done!

aussiecreeder 12-23-2004 11:15 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by - hayley -
Ooh I found one! :D

Wow, that was really good, reminds me a little of PJ's Garden. Well done!


thanks :)......garden? ummm haden't thought of that. i do a bit of a debt to maynard james keenan of a perfect circle for the general theme of the song though.

hayley 01-02-2005 12:23 AM

Yeah just a little like Garden, but it's probably how I interpret that song, it's very personal to me. The "Like a dog I return" line, especially.

But seriously well done it was great

aussiecreeder 01-02-2005 12:47 AM

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Originally Posted by - hayley -
Yeah just a little like Garden, but it's probably how I interpret that song, it's very personal to me. The "Like a dog I return" line, especially.

But seriously well done it was great


thanks i appreciate it! :)
the like a dog line reminds me a bit of the temple of a dog song titled "like a dog" stangely enough although i can't remember if it was thinking of that song at the time.


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