Waterfall

[Dogstar]

Underneath a waterfall
Wash away the dirt and dust
Of another wasted day

Saddled on a carousel
Drift away from the mind clutter
Of another hazy day

Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t make it today
Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t shake it today

Perched atop a snow-white cloud
Far away from the killing field
Of another blackened day

Caught a wave on sea of green
Float away from the devil’s pull
Of another dying day

Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t make it today
Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t fake it today

[aussiecreeder]

another great job i like the alternate chorus the best;

Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t make it today
Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t fake it today

[Dogstar]

Thanks, hide! I love doing alternate chorus...I'm stealing from Jerry...he does it all the time :D. I love the little twist it can put in the lyrics.

[aussiecreeder]

Thanks, hide! I love doing alternate chorus...I'm stealing from Jerry...he does it all the time :D. I love the little twist it can put in the lyrics.

cool i steal all the time! :) OT but have you got Second Skin yet?

[Dogstar]

No, not yet...I have three things I want this week: Second Skin, The APC DVD single Lost in the Bermuda Triangle, and Zakk Wylde's Hangover Music CD...Must go shopping :D. I think I might have to order the Second Skin one online. We'll see...

[aussiecreeder]

No, not yet...I have three things I want this week: Second Skin, The APC DVD single Lost in the Bermuda Triangle, and Zakk Wylde's Hangover Music CD...Must go shopping :D. I think I might have to order the Second Skin one online. We'll see...

okay cool i must get the APC DVD as well, apart from that nothing i really want badly until Contraband that hits Aussie stores June 7th. I have to buy my mum a Human Nature CD (aussie boy band), i don't think my ego will allow me to put that cd on the counter. :)

anyhow back to your poem......

[Dogstar]

Hahahah, I hear that...It kills me to buy my mom stuff sometimes. Hehehe, she loves people like Celine Dion and Mariah Carey and Whitney Houston...UGH....

[Sincirr]

It's got a nice shape.

Its good that U R checking out what your main influences are doing in their stuff, and you are applying it to your personal work. Cool.

[Dogstar]

Thanks, Sincirr. Yeah, I always noticed that about Jerry's lyrics, how he'll just change a word or two in a verse or chorus, and it added so much with just that little adjustment.

[creedsister]

another great job i like the alternate chorus the best;

Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t make it today
Can’t find the way
To tell you why
I can’t fake it today i just read those lines i liked those to, CANT FIND THE WAY TO TELL YOU I CANT FAKE IT TODAY, good job Dogstar i loved it,

[TeriB19]

Drift away from the mind clutter


My life, in a nutshell. Great stuff, Kerri!!

[Dogstar]

Thanks, you guys! Glad you enjoyed it.

[aussiecreeder]

Hahahah, I hear that...It kills me to buy my mom stuff sometimes. Hehehe, she loves people like Celine Dion and Mariah Carey and Whitney Houston...UGH....

hehe well all three can sing but their songs are craptacular well maybe except for mariah's early stuff. my mum must be the world's biggest john farnham fan too.

[Dogstar]

Hahahah, my nephew uses that word, craptacular :D...Cracks me up...yeah, their songs are sooo bad...and all that over-emoting. I can't deal. It hurts my ears.

[aussiecreeder]

Hahahah, my nephew uses that word, craptacular :D...Cracks me up...yeah, their songs are sooo bad...and all that over-emoting. I can't deal. It hurts my ears.

LOL it is a great word! :) their songs are crap but there are a couple of mariah songs where i'm left thinking wow that is some range she had.

[Dogstar]

Hey, btw, hide, I finally found Second Skin on half.com, so I should get it within the week! Can't wait to hear it. All the customer reviews give it an enthusiastic thumbs-up!

[Sheila63]

What a wonderful poem, Kerri. I love your work!:clap: :clap:

It's funny how you're using Jerry Cantrell's style in your writing. When I've shared some of my stuff with people that are familiar with Creed, they see Stapp's style/influence in my writing. Funny how that happens. :)

[Dogstar]

Heheh, yeah...can't help but be influenced after listening so much. That's so cool that you have a Creed style :jam:....thanks for the kinds words, too :)

[aussiecreeder]

Hey, btw, hide, I finally found Second Skin on half.com, so I should get it within the week! Can't wait to hear it. All the customer reviews give it an enthusiastic thumbs-up!

sweet you'll have to tell me what you think of it! its good guitar driven rock with cool vocals so you should like it! if you like that "fallout" is good but much harder to get into. using an AIC analogy if "Second Skin" is "Dirt" then "Fallout" is "Facelift".

[Dogstar]

Gotcha...I love Facelift, though, too, so maybe I'll get that one if I like Second Skin.

[Creed_Defaultgirl]

Good job Kerri! You always have so much emotion in your poems!

[Dogstar]

Thank you, Creed_Defaultgirl! I'm glad you liked it. :)

[Creed_Defaultgirl]

Your welcome, I love reading your poems. I've never read one I didn't like.

[Dogstar]

Awww, thank you. That's sweet of you to say! :)

[SCOTTSMYMAN]

Drift away from the mind clutter

Have to agree with Teri and this line.

Another beautiful poem. I love reading your stuff.

[Dogstar]

Thanks, Kris!!! And uh....NICE AVATAR :D!