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Alter Shredder
12-30-2003, 09:15 AM
This is my newest. I am not quite liking the way parts came together but I know thinking about it is not good when it comes to lyrics. Umm, anyway tell me what ya think and if you have any suggestions I am willing to take them.

-not yet named but im thinking Restless Soul-

Clouds and gray swirling in the eyes
freedom and serenity are no longer yours
you seem to be fooling everyone, even yourself

as the storm begins to take form
the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind

Your eyes, oh they tell a story,
one that no one knows
those eyes are the gateway to
your soul, your restless soul

screaming inside, i know you are
further away you drift (from all you know)
trying to hide the pain inside
blind to all emotion
you are breaking down
silently those eyes beg for help

as the storm begins to take form
the lightning flashes and crackles inside your mind

Your eyes, oh they tell a story,
one that no one knows
those eyes are the gateway to
your soul, your restless soul

what you cant say, is clear to me
your soul has been exposed
I read your eyes, It is over now
no need for pain, wash it all away

JulieCitySlicker
12-30-2003, 02:31 PM
That was good Iced :) :D

Creed_Defaultgirl
12-30-2003, 03:24 PM
I think it was great.

MrSeeker
12-30-2003, 05:01 PM
Yea, that was good :D

creedsister
12-30-2003, 05:50 PM
Iced that one was great~`I know you are further away drift from all you know~~liked that line~` :) ~What You Cant Say Is Clear To Me Your Soul Has Been exposed I Read Your Eyes Its Over Now No Need For Pain WHASH IT ALL AWAY~~~Killer Loved it

Dogstar
12-30-2003, 07:10 PM
SWEET, Iced!

This verse really got to me:

screaming inside, i know you are
further away you drift (from all you know)
trying to hide the pain inside
blind to all emotion
you are breaking down
silently those eyes beg for help

Excellent!