"i Cant"

[MrSeeker]

[B]The Things That Should Not Be[B]

"The person that i loved the most has turned their back on me

You can take a look inside me,but there will be nothing to see because Im empy (and because you dont love me)
Its hard to tell,but im a hollow shell that hurts like Hell
(because you dont love me)
Tears run down my cheek because im broken and weak
(and because you dont love me)
Im tired of feeling this pain just because things couldnt stay the same
(and because you dont love me)

I cant keep going through this with stains on my wrist,because its its you i miss.
I cant keep holding on to somthing that will never be, as you hand my broken heart back to me.
I cant keep crying for you to love me again,because i know you just want to be friends.
I cant keep lieing to myself,telling myself you still love me.

I still ask myself how can it be that you dont love me,only to soon realize that you do love me,but i was too blind to see that before.
I was too busy worrying about what i would be if you didnt love me,only to find time to find out you do love me and need me.
...I was haunted by thoughts of you leaving me,only to see you,there, waiting for me all along. (Hold me and never let me go!!!)"

I wrote it 2 hours ago,so what do you think? I just thought I would share it since I havent shared anything for ahwile. Hope ya like it!

[Dogstar]

Wow, MrSeeker...really touching and pretty sad :(. A lot of pain there. Well put, by the way...I really love this line:

I cant keep holding on to somthing that will never be, as you hand my heart back to me.

[MrSeeker]

Thanks! I wrote in about 10 minutes,just felt like writing somthing and well,i guess thats what came out. That line is my favorite part too! So thats cool,Im glad you liked it!!!

[Dogstar]

The writing process can be amazing like that, can't it? It's very therapeutic.

[MrSeeker]

Yea, tell me about it. Its weird somtimes when you like write a couple lines and than look back on them and your like,wow, i cant believe i just wrote that.
I put all my feeling into what i write, like if im angy i just go write and get my anger and stuff out on paper, so that way i dont bash stuff.
This song/poem was inspired by my gf and i braking up(as you might be able to tell),hehe.

[Dogstar]

Exactly! Writing is a much more constructive way of dispensing with pain and anger than some ways others choose. It's like exorcising all the bad stuff. When I'm really angry and have to get something off my chest, I hit the journal. That's where the real stuff is, uneditied, pure, unadulterated anger, LOL...But still, much better than taking it out on someone else or even yourself. For some reason, putting it to paper really helps...It's weird, too, how one little phrase can lead to a whole poem. I write them down whenever they pop into my head and then I build on them when I feel the need to expunge...Been feeling that a lot lately, hehehe.

[creedsister]

wow,,kev,,that was the best one yet its killer straight to the heart i loved the ending,,,too yep yep

[MrSeeker]

Yea, its very cool how that stuff works.
Thanks Ta!
Im re-naming the song to, "The Things That Should Not Be",ok?

[creedsister]

ok,,lil bro,,

[Dogstar]

Way cool optional title, MrSeeker...like that a lot.

[MrSeeker]

Thanks,I like it better. I have to many titles saying somthing like "I _"
So yea.

[creedsister]

ye,,its all good,,in stuff,,

[MrSeeker]

Im going to bed ya'll. ttyl...o_0
:)

[creedsister]

nite nite

[MrSeeker]

im awake now,haha

[creedsister]

yea iknow last night is like,,over now

[MrSeeker]

yea, haha. i just realized that i should add broken heart in this line:
"I cant keep holding on to the things that will never be, as you hand my BROKEN heart back to me".
its better like that,dont ya think? i should have edited this a couple times before posting it instead i just wrote it and put it here right away,hehe

[creedsister]

yea that would be better,,i post stuff and i never misplace what i want to say,,i just,,misspell theme,,ya know,,

[Torn Signs]

you seem to have a flame within your heart that can burn quite exquistely and beautifully on paper. Keep up the work, this was so sensual and so true.

[MrSeeker]

Thanks alot for your kind words, It means alot to me :)

[creedsister]

yea all thats stuffs all good,,hes just a darn good little writer,,there

[MrSeeker]

Thank you Ta!!! You girls are some darn good writers your selves ;)

[creedsister]

you know it,,i try anyways

[MrSeeker]

I am gonna get this copy written, you guys seem to like it alot.

[Alter Shredder]

Very nice man. I can just feel your passion leaping off the screen.

The fact that it is this well crafted and done in only ten minutes proves that one shouldnt Try to write. Just let the thoughts and feelings come naturally. (Thats why I havent posted anything new, nothing doing as of now. I just keep forcing the issue and coming up with crap)

I cant wait to see more of your stuff

[creedsister]

OK

[MrSeeker]

Thanks alot Iced!!! Im glad you enjoyed it!
I have alot more stuff to post,i just never really find time to do it.
Just so you know,that most of the stuff i will be posting is darker ;)

[creedsister]

<!--QuoteBegin-Iced+12-03-2003 10:09 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Iced @ 12-03-2003 10:09 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Very nice man. I can just feel your passion leaping off the screen.

The fact that it is this well crafted and done in only ten minutes proves that one shouldnt Try to write. Just let the thoughts and feelings come naturally. (Thats why I havent posted anything new, nothing doing as of now. I just keep forcing the issue and coming up with crap)

I cant wait to see more of your stuff [/b][/quote]
I wish i had to force the issue

[MrSeeker]

I cant write for nothing if I dont feel like writing. Like sometimes Im bored and want to write,but nothing good ever comes out of it,believe me ;)

[Dogstar]

<!--QuoteBegin-Iced+12-03-2003 10:09 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Iced @ 12-03-2003 10:09 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> The fact that it is this well crafted and done in only ten minutes proves that one shouldnt Try to write. Just let the thoughts and feelings come naturally. [/b][/quote]
So true! Forcing something never works, at least not for me.

[MrSeeker]

Nope, I dont think it works for any of us

[creedsister]

<!--QuoteBegin-MrSeeker+12-04-2003 03:36 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (MrSeeker @ 12-04-2003 03:36 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Nope, I dont think it works for any of us [/b][/quote]
how rite are you indeed

[MrSeeker]

HAHA ;)

[creedsister]

ya;;;;