Asylum

[Dogstar]

Crown of thorns is getting tight
Cobalt veins pierce the night
Body shaking soaked in sweat
Spirit broken objective met

Choking on tears
Gasping for air
Fragile psyche
Hangs by a hair

Bleeding, peeling, scabbing skin
Head won’t heal, can’t calm the din
Violet rage draped in red
Scarlet letter to soul is wed

Choking on tears
Gasping for air
Blistered psyche
Oozes despair

Come to me blue angels scream
Take you far from nightmare scene
One more swallow watch the glow
Soon you’ll reach the rabbit hole

Choking on tears
Gasping for air
Shattered psyche
Beyond repair

[Redeemer]

Wow...mind if I borrow that? Psych, just kidding, I don't know what I would do with it if I could. But the thing is, I see a shadow of Sidonie Creed in it. It's hella weird. And very interesting. I really like your style--succinct, vivid, and very, very mature. In a few words: I BET STAPPY WOULD LOVE IT!!!! Heh heh, just kidding. ;)

[SCOTTSMYMAN]

Another awesome poem by: Kerri! Girl, I was waiting for a new one. I can't believe how wonderful your poetry is. I was feeling some rage in that one! Keep the words flowing! :thumbsup:

[Dogstar]

Thanks, you guys!
Sid, that's weird that you see some of you in that, but cool that people can find something in it for them. That's what I like about poems and music. It's whatever it means to the person hearing or reading it.

[creedsister]

more misery i think i like it

[Dogstar]

LOL, I hope I didn't bum ya out or anything...guess that's my negative side coming out. Writing helps me stay balanced :D.

[MrSeeker]

That was very very good, I wish I could write like that!!!

[Dogstar]

Awww, thank you, MrSeeker :).

[MrSeeker]

Your very welcome :)

[Redeemer]

It is weird, eh? But also is the mark of some real damn good poetry. :flowers: :D

[Dogstar]

Thanks, Sid! You're too kind.

[njcreedite]

Love it. Dark, imagery(sp?), good cadence...excellent!!!!!
Just the kind of stuff I wish I could write.......well, maybe someday. :( Not there yet.....

[Sheila63]

Powerful poem, Kerri!!! :clap: :clap: I feel the intensity of the pain and desperation.

[Redeemer]

Hey creedite, let US be the judge of that!!! ;)

[creedsister]

lol

[SCOTTSMYMAN]

<!--QuoteBegin-Redeemer+12-04-2003 12:59 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Redeemer @ 12-04-2003 12:59 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Hey creedite, let US be the judge of that!!! ;) [/b][/quote]
She's too shy! Right Linda! :lol: Very quiet girl that one! :roll:

[Dogstar]

<!--QuoteBegin-Redeemer+12-04-2003 12:59 PM--></div><table border='0' align='center' width='95%' cellpadding='3' cellspacing='1'><tr><td>QUOTE (Redeemer @ 12-04-2003 12:59 PM)</td></tr><tr><td id='QUOTE'><!--QuoteEBegin--> Hey creedite, let US be the judge of that!!! ;) [/b][/quote]
Yeah ;)...it's the spirit of giving ;).

[Redeemer]

Oooooohhhhhh...SCOTTSMYMAN's avie is hypnotizing me.........
lol!