Poem

[SmEeKy]

This is a free verse poem I wrote. I know I'm not a good writer so please don't critisize.



Reality or Imagination?

An Intense perception annihilated
from reality begins creating a pattern of desire
Imagination or reality?
Confused as I am, its roots bring love
showering yearn all over my heart
I can sense anticipation
An angel from heaven?
A fantasy, a dream infiltrating
Sounds can be heard words are spoken
Demolishing the aggravation when my heart truly speaks
Devouring the anger and hate
Is it a dream?
My true words must speak:
An image of an angel descending
from heaven in from a precious golden entity
a sense I feel far from all pain and hate
Jade eyes from the sea they fall,
opposing all reality
Hair is golden silk, its shines spark bright
and its force is great
Deeper in the golden entity I can find
a beauty that lies and blinds
my mind from spaces full of feelings I hesitate to partake
Impaction has collided
The very end is when the dream fulfills

[goddess_bb]

Scariest part opening your self up this way huh?? Don't worry no one usually critizes here...unless you write a Creed-bashing poem..lol.
I am starting to feel like a poem-critic here since I seem to be the one that responds to what everyone writes...so may I say I really like the "visual" that your poem gives..it's lovely. You should post more..

[SmEeKy]

Yeah it was and since I'm kind of new to creedfeed. Well thanks for the compliment :-). I didn't think anyone would like that poem. I guess I could post one more...

[goddess_bb]

You should...we all all have our own threads of our poems...Mine is "the brave thread" there is also Sam, Creedgirl, Aimee and some others..we have an agreement to be gentle and loving in our critic of eachother..so don't be afraid and if it feels good to share do...:D

[SmEeKy]

wow that sounds cool. My poems don't rhyme actually lol because I suck when it comes to rhyming. But hey thanks for the kind words :-)

[goddess_bb]

most of mine don't either...I just haven't posted many of my free verse ones...

[SmEeKy]

I read some of your poems. You are a great poet. You should post your free verse ones, I would love to read them :-)

[goddess_bb]

Thank you you are really sweet to say that :embarass: anyways, ask and you shall recieve...:lol: here is one of my free verse ones..

Am I in control?
Or am I foolin myself?
Maybe the entire world?
I run till I am crazy..
To keep the darkness at bay
Every so often it sneaks,
Up behind me...
Wrapping it's cold arms around me
It pulls at me
Pushing me towards the pit
You know the pit
Like me you have been there,
The place where there is
No light, no peace
Only the darkest and deepest of despair,
Reside there....
As the dark arms wrap around me
I struggle, I fight
For I am strong
Today I have courage
The will to fight--
I am in Control.

[Siana]

i like that one

[SmEeKy]

cool poem! sounds better than mine

[goddess_bb]

Does not...this is not a matter who's better because no one is...it's all personal expression so equally beautiful. You are a great poet, SmeEky..keep it up.. there are many of us here who love reading what you write...

[SmEeKy]

Originally posted by goddess_bb
there are many of us here who love reading what you write...

I didn't know others loved reading my poems

thanks goddess :) you're a great poet also

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