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tru2mine
03-11-2003, 11:30 PM
heres another one i wrote. sometimes i like it sometimes i dont i guess it depends on what kinda mood im in.



He hates me, he makes me walk this path,
and he won't save me, he's lazy,
he says im always ok, but am i crazy,
when something goes bad, he always blames me
i pray please, but things always go wrong,
look at me strangely as if to say my mind is far gone,
the pain is strong, i sit and wonder why he betrays me,
builds me up to knock me down its like a game and he plays me,
I give up, i quit, leave me alone go away,
everyday i gotta see you, i have nothin to say,
your undefeated, your flawless, i have no shield for my protection,
my words are gone, im so empty i have lost all direction,
but you are mortal and in my heart i choose not to accept this,
cause all you are, all you really are is the image of my reflection


the style is kinda different its hard to read and make it sound right but you get the point, let me know what you think.

JulieCitySlicker
03-11-2003, 11:52 PM
I liked it:P :dancing: ;)

Siana
03-14-2003, 06:11 AM
me 2

HigherGirl
03-14-2003, 07:17 PM
Me too...pretty good!!!!